piepiemann22

Over all it was okay, but i don't personally like it. You had a few mistakes and I'll point them out for you. 1.) Your punctuation needs work. In the ...

Over all the poem was ok, but that's it. Just your run of the mill poem. nothing special, nothing grand. It's just so plain. Do i need to go on? ...

Um, where do I begin. I really just don't like it at all. There is no real idea behind it, imagery is no where to be found, and I don't ...

Over all I like it. The idea is clear and easy to understand. I'm not one for grammar and that stuff, I'm more about content. Lets see... The two basic ...

I like the idea more than the poem itself. I did like how your first three lines became the starting lines to your stanzas, but it needs work. 1.) Second ...

I like the idea, but the way you wrote it is an eye swore. It repeats way to much, I lost interest not even half way through. Stop with the ...

Over all I liked it. The topic was nice and it flowed well. 1.) You could have added a bit more punctuation to help us know how you want it ...

Don't feel so bad. Many consider me Emo. It caused me to experience depression. I'm still on medication and it's been two years. Even so, I got over it. I ...

I read it and liked it. The problem is I'm tired and can't think strait. I'll reread it tomarrow and give you a better reply. One major thing is characterization. ...

In a way I like it. I get the idea behind it, but it needs some work all the same. 1) I go to the doctor and her says I'm ...

It was short, but good at the same time. I've written a short poem like this too and people also liked it. The only thing with short poems is it's ...

Let's see, over all I liked it. The topic is good and you had decent word choice. Just a few things to make it better. 1) The rhyming was way ...

Ask and you shall receive. Now to get started. 1) No foundation. Your stanza lengths are all out of whack. Try to even them out. 2) The idea of the ...

I have to agree with Chandni on this one. Try to fiddle with it adding for detail and description. The idea is very common, writing about the sun rise and ...

I liked it, thou it is short. my first poems were short too. I realized that even thou I was able to get the feeling across I needed more imagery. ...