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This reminds me of what happens to a lot people, in fact, all people. Change. I don't know if that's what you had in mind, but i really like this. ...

I really like this, the language is great. :) Just be a little clearer on the POVs, kk? Keep writing, Risa

I think this could be a decent story. If I had more time, I'd crit. this properly *sorry, I have food waiting too...sigh*

YAY EDWARD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I agree with stella on the confusion of the time period. This also need more emotion to really capture a reader. Otherwise, I really liked this story. Write on, Risa ...

Chapter Two (") A. The whole town knows it; you know how news travels round ere. B. we let you tell cuz it was quite funny, watching you waste your ...

I like this. Slight warning though, the 'mysterious air' has been done countless times (by myself included). Keep writing, Risa

I like it. :) Besides some grammatorial (is that right?) errors, this is really good. keep it up.

Hello =P I really liked this poem (maybe i should try this poem writing tactic...hmmm), but the two lines of the last stanza kinda threw me off.

I've read one of the other related series, ahhhhh! what is it called! but its really good :)

I was confused (no surprise there :) ) at some parts, but I like the descriptions.

AMEN!!!!! I love this poem girl! It gives people visualization of the love Christ has for us.

please critique :)

I like it. its easy to relate to. I think this musical is worth writing. :)

LUUUUUUVV it!