penny

I, personally, liked the sing songyness lol. I think it fits, even though the poem is somewhat...not so happy, because all the comparisons are toys. I think it plays into ...

mmm...i agree with teapot (can i call you that? lol) about the using similar words in the same line. plus, both of those lines kind of bored me a little. ...

oh, i love it. Your subject choice is unusually nice. You did a really nice job. You start with a description, and then the question "what is it like to ...

mm...I just got a tiny bit confused. You started out talking about The Visitor as a proper noun, as someone specific. and then you stopped capitalizing it. I really think ...

mmk...being gentle with alexis :wink: okay, i really liked it, but the end doesn't quite fit. Actually, I think it would be more effective if you just left it at ...

i really enjoyed this poem. some of the rhymes are a little off. someone else mentioned that...about reading it aloud. it could flow a little better, but besides that I ...

very nice. your word choice showed the anger, but without becoming just...vulgar curses, lol. didn't you have a line about honey in another poem of yours? or was that someone ...

for a title you could try something about the necklace? And do we get to find out what happens to them? I'm very anxious to know lol. good job! and ...

A muttered apology was all I could muster After your brief (but majestic) speech About ‘keeping that terror on a leash’ - I really like the splash of rhyme. I ...