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I'm very intrigued. In the good way xD I thought it was awesome, and I found myself being sucked in and wanting more. That's wonderful! I rarely get sucked into ...

Hi! Here to review ;) A snowy winter plain lay under the starry night sky. I think that period would do better being a comma ;) Bright stars seemed dwarfed ...

Okays, I'm just going to be flat out here. 1. well, it seems to lack a bit of structure. 2. I couldn't find much rhythm? It seems some of your ...

Hiyas! Your name is so awesome xD In all the summer nights that had been seen in Cumbria, today was one of the more beautiful ones. Why? I read this ...

Hello Serendipity ^_^ Okay, I found the last stanza to be sloppy, no offense. The line you stuck on the end of the poem was unneeded. Also, I would try ...

Hi there, Rascalover! I like Rascal Flatts too :) OK, now onto the review. Nit- picks His scruffy hair fell into his eyes, as he swung his legs over the ...

Hello Werewolf girl! Have you per chance read Twilight? Just wondering. Anyways, I'm April, here to welcome you to YWS and review your poem. :D Let's get started, shall we? ...

'Tis simple and elegant; I love it. For once, I really don't think it should be longer: It would ruin the uniqueness this poem has. It seems to be written ...

I took deep a breath, “I am going to be late.” I repeated to myself, one hundred times to calm my nerves. You have an issue or two with punctuation ...

Eyes. I can see them. I can sense them. And they look at me, And they inspect me, And suddenly I’m different. I like how you end your lines abruptly ...

Hiya Blot! Here to review. OK, I mostly found that the stanzas vary in length much more than I'd like to see them do. You could maybe break them up ...

I loved it June. Loved. It. But since when is June known to write something I don't love? :D OK, I found that you had a nice flow, rhythm, and ...

Looking at the previous responses on this page, there hasn't been one really thorough review/ critique. I am here to change that, mwahaha >=) My eyes pacing to find an ...

I can't find much to critique because of the length, I'm sorry. Try making it longer, maybe? Actually, for a subject like this, it can only be made so long... ...

Hello! I'm April, nice to meet you Warrior Girl! Welcome to YWS, since you seem to be partially new. ;) Ok, lets get started; Voices, voices all around me, I ...