parisanmilo

gosh icaruss, that was harsh well anyway, i kinda agree with his main and basic, underlying thought about the piece, it's pretty typical and it's called school politics, humans generally ...

haha, love the ending. 'Let's elope' sounds more realistic. try 'sending shivers down her spine.' 'The morning was sunny/the sun so bright.' repetition of sun(ny) shows lack of vocab. and ...

it's called a prose poem. or free verse ask your friend whether shakespeare is blank verse or prose. =.=" try 'Get out! Get out! Get out!' increases emotion and suspence ...

dude try going through 7 years of repetitive 'break-ups' and tell me whether it's overdramatic to not move on and see life itself. the poem reminds me of a clichéd ...

loving this poem, it flows quite very naturally, and the message's really beautiful the 'just' in line 2 is a bit awkward and disrupts the flow a bit, 'when' in ...

nice repitition in opening and closing rhyme is the second stanza missing 2 lines? I always wanted you As I often still do try 'I've' instead of 'I'? Hanging onto ...

seems clichéd, extremely. is it free verse? or prosepoem? more definite and clear rhyme scheme needed. if not uhh... why's the guy a skank? i thought skanks were promiscuous women.. ...