Best Friends For Never

by Kairii

Published September 24, 2008

You said we were forever
Best friends till the end
And then cut me with your words
Again and again and again.

And you expect me
To sit and take it.
You expect me to smile
Even if I have to fake it.

But you break me apart
And you kill me inside
And you take and take
And I'm biding my time.

And I know that this isn't
The way it should be
We should be best friends
You and me.

We had always been
Best friends forever
I don't want us to be
Best friends for never.

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wombat
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wombat commented Comment · Oct 2, 2008

I have been through the same thing myself just last year and I think your poem was a good expression of the emotions that you feel when it happens.

It sounds quite a lot like a song and I loved it =)

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CrazyBob
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CrazyBob wrote a review Review · Oct 1, 2008

Friends always let you down, it seems, and all you have is yourself. It's a lonely and selfish world, and you're lucky if you can find one decent person who cares about you and gives back. Anyway, the poem could definitely use some imagery, as it is mainly just feelings and ideas being dealt with abstractly. Try to find some images that would be applicable here, perhaps as a metaphor for your feelings.

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parisanmilo
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parisanmilo wrote a review Review · Oct 1, 2008

dude try going through 7 years of repetitive 'break-ups' and tell me whether it's overdramatic to not move on and see life itself.

the poem reminds me of a clichéd movie, where the two best friends are gonna hug each other in the end
but hey, people look for fantasy and better lives, thus the existence of clichés.

but, on the positive side,
sounds more like a song tho, good flow
and it's relatable and this kinda shit really happens a lot, thus good in those terms

it's simple, upfront and easy to read, i like it.

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Amira15
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Amira15 commented Comment · Oct 1, 2008

Its really interesting. Having your best friend hurt you badly as I can read. Good emotion, Nothing but nod's of excellence from me.

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lordgluzman
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lordgluzman commented Comment · Sep 30, 2008

not bad

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silverSUNLIGHTx
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silverSUNLIGHTx commented Comment · Sep 24, 2008

I completely understand. This is a really emotional poem and i get where it's coming from, but you might want to reword a few things. Maybe add some more descriptive words to make it more poetic.
But over all it was good.
nice job.

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xGraceex
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xGraceex wrote a review Review · Sep 24, 2008

I liked it, its the first poem on here that i have read about your best friend hurting you, and i think you really expressed your emotions in it. One thing though - what could your best friend have done to make you write she kills you inside? if a person does that how could you be friends with them?! lol i really liked your poem, five stars from me :P



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