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Re: Servant of the White Sun - Chapter 3 - Shelter of the Sun
Thank you for the review. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story too. I'll keep your comments in mind. A good review day to you :)
Apr 28, 2019 -
Re: Servant of the White Sun - Chapter 2 - Shelter of the Sun
Ok. I'll keep that in mind. It's been a while since I last published on YWS (too little time), but it's a breath of fresh air. So, thank you for ...
Apr 12, 2019 -
Re: Servant of the White Sun - Chapter 2 - Shelter of the Sun
Glad you enjoyed the chapter. Thanks for the remarks, I'll keep them in mind for rewrites times%u2026 But boy aren't you right about the vocabulary...I had to put together a ...
Apr 12, 2019 -
Re: Servant of the White Sun - Chapter 1 - Shelter of the Sun
Thank you for the review. I'll think about the repetition thing. You're not the first one to point out that I do that a lot in action scenes. I guess ...
Apr 5, 2019 -
Re: Servant of the White Sun - Chapter 1 - Shelter of the Sun
Thanks for the review. Always helpful. Yes, I've got plenty more material in this story. It's been a while since I've last posted (life%u2026) but I've been writing while I ...
Apr 5, 2019 -
Re: Wait For Me - Chapter 1 (Never Came Back)
I thought that was probably what you were going with. A small thing that tripped me up is that you refer to your MP by her name even in the ...
Apr 5, 2019 -
Re: Dirty Town - Song
Right? Good luck with the teachers, anyway. I hope they'll like it as much as we do. :)
Apr 4, 2019 -
Re: Dirty Town - Song
I don't think it would be my kind of music, normally, but I really enjoyed the song. Your friend sings very well. I also found the experience you describe very ...
Apr 4, 2019 -
Re: Chapter 1 Wis-per
You're welcome.
Apr 4, 2019 -
Re: Bitter Oracle - Chapter 14 - Michael's Grief
Thanks for another review. Yes, I suck at descriptions, I tend to focus on what people do and not on where they do it or on what they look like. ...
Sep 15, 2018 -
Re: Bitter Oracle - Chapter 13 - The Vision
I'm glad you like Bitter's voice (I'm a little in love myself). As usual, I see what you mean about Scrying and I've got an explanation, if not a solution. ...
Sep 10, 2018 -
Re: Bitter Oracle - Chapter 12 - Kyle’s Place
Yes, I don't want it to feel clunky or disrespectful, but it's a challenge to represent Mike's disability faithfully and not to ruin my dialogue at the same time.
Sep 7, 2018 -
Re: Bitter Oracle - Chapter 12 - Kyle’s Place
I'll obviously try to improve my descriptions. What you said about Mike's stutter made me think about a Christie book, "Murder in Mesopotamia". At some point, the narrator complains that ...
Sep 7, 2018 -
Re: The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 51
They ruin my texts too. Mine always sends "bop" when I write "Nop". And "bop" means absolutely nothing in French.
Sep 3, 2018 -
Re: The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 51
Ok. I thought it was another American expression I didn't know. :D
Sep 2, 2018