oneeyedunicornhunter

i like the metaphors, but that's about all i see going for this poem. you're could use some work :p still, i like what it was about. maybe instead of ...

i appreciate you guys replying to my poem, and i hate to be a critique-beggar, but would you mind being a little more thorough? i'd really appreciate it. thanks!

i'll agree with leja on this one. what does love have to do with success? or maybe you're talking about succeeding in finding love? i think if you made this ...

i can't really say i liked what this poem was saying very much, as a former catholic(now an atheist)... as for conventions, they were mediocre, but that can be improved. ...

hmm i could imagine that being a song... but there wasn't really much about it that blew me away. it was okay, but next time really try to make your ...

AHH please separate the paragraphs. i'll read it if you do, i pwomise!

hmm..i liked the emotion of this one. the rythm was good. the rhyming was okay, but it would help to have a rhyme scheme. overall, 7.75/10. I don't like it ...

hmm. i think one word describes this best: wow. imagery:9.25 rythm:8 emotion:9.75 overall:9 great job!

that was intentional...you have to read it as 'peaces' and as 'pieces' i don't know why, but i like doing that in my poems :roll:

you're is pretty self-absorbed. i wrote it for her, initially. and I know my rythm wasn't the best, but I think it's getting better. when i said 'love as clear ...

wow, this is your real life? two words: that sucks. still, i have to say, it's a good story. you may even want to consider publishing. did i mention that ...