olivia1987uk

I love this...and anybody who knows me will realise I NEVER say that straight away! Everyone has obviously picked up on all the niggling little problems judging by the sheer ...

I think the majority of so called "mistakes" have been picked up by the other member and fellow instructor that have already critiqued your work. SO, trying not repeat what ...

Hi I liked this, don't get me wrong, but it almost seemed more like a descriptive piece of writing rather than a short story...I don't think enough action happened to ...

Hey Sorry to state the obvious but we have to be careful about including things like vampires and werewolves with the current Twilight saga being so popular and mainstream.... you ...

Hi... Are you sure you wouldn't prefer this as a script? Even if you didn't and you wanted to keep this amount of dialogue you need to add more description ...

You've done really well on this and I'm certainly not surprised you got a good grade for this piece... I'm quite interested in what literary magazine you're thinking of submitting ...

Hello again! I told you I would be back! Hehehehe! There's a few minor errors in here in terms of capitalisation missing every now and again and whatnot but you're ...

Hi Joshuapaul... I'm going to read the first chapter straight away so I promise to give you my comments on that as well... The tense worries me...he "wondered" but now ...

Hi! Nice to meet you as a new member! Hope you stick around long enough for us all to get to know each other a little better! I didn't think ...

I'll do a proper review later as I haven't got time to give it the credit it deserves at the mo... You know I love your writing... Thanks for letting ...

I like this...a lot. I'd be really interested to see other entries for this two. You managed to grab and hold my attention and although this should be relatively easy ...

I also felt the lack of punctuation took away from the flow of the seemed stunted and unfinished without the professionality you'd find from capitalisation and what have you.... The ...

Dougie joked, placing his pen down and pushing the leaflets into the centre of the circle table we were both sitting at. Circular table..... I didn’t really have any friends ...

I often find the best way to review someone's work in terms of grammar, particularly to read it aloud. I did this with your piece and found myself struggling. There ...

I'll write this is in the quick reply box before I forget what I wanted to say...Lily's first comment isn't actually right...both ways of phrasing convey the same meaning and ...