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Hey! Okay, so I was thinking that a little bit of it was unclear. You were trying for the whole, two things happening at once, one in her imagination\back of ...

Okay, I cracked at the twilight stuff. Way to go! I am a little bit confused... I thought the introduction was suggesting a very short but strong relationship that was ...

I love it. There was a little too much dialoge, should be replaced with descriptions or filled with pauses, but I think I understand Rose better now. One thing that ...

I liked it!!! It felt like it ended too soon, like there was no "punch line" to the end. Now that that's out of the way... Oki doki, reviewing time! ...

Harry Potter, definitley. The supernaturalist Uglies The Princess Bride I hate to admit this but, The Night Watch, was pretty damn good, no matter how much I hate the second ...

Definitely: The Princess Bride! It's one of the best books for romance, in my mind, plus it'a a classic that you can't go without. There's also The Secret Circle, if ...

This was very interesting. It has been a long time since I've seen one of these stories about princesses and what not. The writing flowed, it matched the era, and ...

First off, and I just really need to say this, guys don't think other guys have great bodies. There. Other than that, they don't like shoping, at least not the ...

This is a very school-ish story. It doesn't have a major plot line, the introduction is very, very average, and the intro to the story itself - the coffee place ...

Hello First off, I loved it. It was very good, extremely so. Actaully, I'm having a hard time critiqueing this piece. See, plot wise, it's a cliche, which came to ...

Okay, so, as everybody commented - it was short. But I liked it. People tend to think there is something wrong in cliches - this was not, however, a complete ...

Okay, I liked it a lot. I mean, a lot. I thought there was a problem of info dump, however [I get that all the time]. How about you split ...

That was very interesting. First off, have mercy on our eyes and break off the paragraphs. The begining was a bit telly, and I was almost getting bored, but then ...

No idea why, but I was sure this was about teenlove in the beginning. Then when I realized the part where it was about your MC's grandmother, I laughed. It ...

Wicked!!! I couldn't stop laughing! Especially the crits part/ :lol: So funny! You did a wonderful job with this. By the end the repitition [which was awesome at first] was ...