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I thought maybe just referring to him as Lucifer rather than the devil it might give more of an undertone of religion. This is because when I mentioned him before ...

Thank you for your review! This review was really helpful, I'm really thankful you took the time to give me a really in-depth review ^_^ The only problem is the ...

Thank you for your review! For your first point I thought about maybe swapping the chapter around, do you think that would help? Or was it more sudden within the ...

Thank you for your review! Don't worry, it wasn't rude you were very helpful ^_^

Thank you for your review! I'm really bad at seeing my mistakes that's why I post them on here :) This prologue doesn't have anything to do this the main ...

Thank you for your review! It's currently only on a first draft so it isn't perfect and a lot of the things you mention I wasn't sure about like names.

Thank you for your review! I did originally have a small section at the beginning but I was told it wasn't any good so I binned it. I see what ...

Thank you for your review! Yeah, this story needs a lot more work so thank you again for your suggestions, I'll make sure to see to them ^_^

Thank for your review! Adonai is God of light and he was molded from the concept of God in christainity but as I have edited this he's drifted further away ...

My goodness, I didn't even notice how many times I used "was", oops. Thank you so much for your review, it will be very helpful when it comes to reviewing ...

Ah, okay. Well, I'm a vegetarian so i don't know much about fish, probably why I didn't get :D

I don't actually know what you mean :D

Thank you for your review! Yeah, people mentioned the switching of view but the repetition was new, I didn't even realise I had done that. I wrote this quite quickly ...

Ah, thank you for your review! The description of her tent was at the end of the fourth chapter but then I changed it :D

Thank you for your review! I'll be sure to take that into account when I go back over it. The video was really helpful by the way :)