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Hi, mechi! I have to say, I love it. The writing sounds like a real book! Can't wait for the next part. She turned off the stove and dumped her ...

Hi, Gwendolen! Welcome to YWS! Don't forget the 2:1 policy - make sure to do 2 reviews for every 1 piece of writing that you post. I like this. The ...

Hi, GreatEscape. He only went inside the café because it was the first place he’d spotted where he could smoke inside . It was raining outside and he wanted warm ...

This is really lovely, Eraqio. Reminds me of Annabel Lee by Poe. I like the rhyme. They found her face down in the water, peaceful as can be, but none ...

Wow, Krupp's right! A poem that has a rhyme scheme and an actual rhythm? That is a rarity. So well done, just for that. I have to say I don't ...

Dear Raimunda, These are really quite lovely. As nonsensical as ever I could have hoped. The first three near perfection. I guess I could nitpick and ask, what does it ...

Do you really want your innermost thoughts and feelings critiqued? Well, I'll just say a few things. Obviously, this had a very intimate, spoken type of feel. Like a stream ...

Hello, fluteluvr. And yet, so many memories Have been made I don't like the passive voice here. There’s so much to thank for It’s hard to think of it all ...

Hi, again! She watched as people strolled mindlessly, almost robotically, like zombies down East Avenue on the eroding sidewalks that traced the buildings in the city like old chalk. I ...

Hi, 82manycookies. Cute username! Don't forget the 2:1 YWS policy - 2 reviews for every 1 story/poem/etc. you post. The trees swayed harmoniously in the channeled wind that crept around ...

Hello, Drama Queen! This is pretty well-written. I didn't find any spelling or grammar errors. I do wonder why "in-limbo" is hyphenated. Why isn't it just "You're in limbo"? Unless ...

Hi, Ashleigh. A story, with such emotion that your gut will wrench in pain as if you were the being it was happening to. You don't need the comma here. ...

Hi, Hao! Great poem. Really sad. I think it is a bit long. You have four stanzas of "What happened to this?" and "What happened to that?" The lament started ...

Hello, Geek. Interesting poem. I Am Geeek Please stick to standard spellings. My apologies if this is a typo. I am a geek. I can apply the force to any ...

I want to hug you, this made me so happy. I like that this is very sensory. It involves tastes and smells and sounds and temperatures and I can feel ...