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The trees swayed harmoniously in the channeled wind that crept around them, their shadows dancing lightly on the grass from the lanterns set around the large perimeter of the lake. A lone woman stood stationary, quietly inches above the water. The cloak hiding her face drooped so that the very tip was soaked in the crystal clear river. Around her was a thick layer of ice that had frozen over her illuminating her pale skin and silver hair.
Several men had gathered the lake and were throwing rope over the large imprisoned woman, so that it sunk lower into the river. One man was newer than the rest and was being teased by the older group.
Ooooh well this is quite the scene to start off with, especially since you've nicely dropped us right into the middle of this with no context as to who exactly is supposed to be the "bad guys" in this scene which means we have to try and pick a side. It adds on nicely to the sheer mystery of the scene to see this woman frozen in this manner being lowered into a lake in what seems like a way that shouldn't be nearly as complicated as it is. It makes for a very powerful moment here and as a reader it instantly makes you curious as to what could be going on here.
“So, do you miss your mommy?” one of them asked, ruffling the rookie’s dark brown hair that usually hung in his face. The draftee pushed him away, irrated, and looked for something to throw at him. Nearby was a large but easy to lift rock, so he quickly let go of the rope which slid off the ice right into the man on the other end. The draftee looked up and quickly picked the rock up and chucked it at the man who had teased him, but the man dodged it right into another worker. The iceberg, however, couldn’t dodge and the rock slammed right into it cracking the ice. The woman inside began to sink and the whole iceberg was completely submerged in a matter of seconds sending waves lapping at the rookie’s feet.
“You broke it, brainless. What if that brute comes back?”
“Are you crazy? There’s no way she’s alive.” The draftee said watching as the last tip of ice became invisible beneath the dark waters of Lake Meth.
Okayy well that slight teasing comment certainly makes matters that much more mysterious as we witness whatever is going on here end up complete. Its a very neat piece to start things off I think. There's just enough hints tossed out that things are too vague, but I love how little we're given as far as context is concerned adding quite nicely to the mystery and the ever so slight hint at a cliffhanger at the end completes this piece quite nicely I think to make a wonderful opening piece here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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