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I couldn't figure out how to fix the first stanza. Tell me what you think of the other changes. A mother is someone to lean on. A mother is someone ...

Thank you! Updated version on the way.

Thank you. It took me about thirty pieces of paper before I was happy with it. And I know it's cliche... :) Couldn't help it.. I read it out loud ...

Thanks. What do you think of the message, the grammar, the structure?

It was good, but left much to be desired. I'll giv you the obvious grammar mistakes first. Your kow how people say nothing can ever get more worse from already ...

it wasn't a poem. period... Many of our excellent critiquers will not even look at this because its all together.. feel free to pm me once it is more than ...

I understand. I really do. I;'ve been through it all, and I know. Many people that writing their raw feelings will make their poem or story more powerful. Rarely is ...

This is gonna sound stupid, but what if Dumbledore was a Horcrucx? What if he knew it and thats why he died, hmm??? Anyway, good theories... I finished the book ...

MORE!!! PLEASE More! *whimpers*

Ok..I just need to say a few more things and then I will be done. Ok you are one year older than me so you don't have every little skill ...

I don't care wether you like it or not....I wrote it because all of this is true I may sound like a 2 year old but when it comes to ...

I don't care wether you like it or not....I wrote it because all of this is true I may sound like a 2 year old but when it comes to ...

Thanks for the opinions.. I know it is typical, believe me. I will probably end up working on it a bit later.

in my blog, i wanted help figuring it out and here, i wanted help to make it a poem... thanks

Oh, this is rich. Heh...Best line in any story I've read....hehe... *grins evilly* Excellent as usual, a bit more humorous than usual. Nevertheless, excellent