Young Writers Society

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You two, fighting like cubs... You're both not perfect, accept it. Some people just like different tates Kaitlyn so they critisize other works to make it fit to their likings. Believe me, there have been some harsh things said about my stories, i didn't care, but when they judged me for being stupid and said I wasn't good enough I should stop, yes, I did get testy. Hmm... I wonder if that girl is dead yet....

hey peace out everybody

Ok..I just need to say a few more things and then I will be done. Ok you are one year older than me so you don't have every little skill to make something perfect, I'm not trying to sound immature or like a little kid.

But hey this was a quick write and my friend and I were bored so we wrote this. I have seen alot of writings like this on the YWS so I'm not the only one who could use a few adjustments....its not all that easy to take some of the words people say.

Especially when you've spent alot of time working on them. I love the help don't get me wrong but I also need a little like niceness when it comes to helping. I know I need to be able to except the fact that some people won't like every little thing I write down, and I understand that.

Because I know there are some poems/stories out there that I don't like all that much either. But if you could help in a way that isn't so critical I would appreciate that. But if you are just gonna be a stuck up snob about it. Then I really don't want the help.

I just needed to say that. And I need to say Im sorry for being so snotty about it. I should have just said thanks. Like you said and carried on with my life.

Kutestuff - Nikki was not attacking you or the feelings or thoughts that inspired this poem. All she was saying was that the poem itself was... well... horrible... I'm sure that she never meant any of it to sound mean or evil. But this is a writers site, and when people post here, they basically expect it to be picked apart so that the mistakes can be ironed out and fixed to make the piece all the better. We're not trying to knock you down, we're simply trying to help... Please keep that in mind when you're reading our responses to your work, because we are really only trying to help you out.

Okay... every body calm down...

Kutestuff - Nikki was not attacking you or the feelings or thoughts that inspired this poem. All she was saying was that the poem itself was... well... horrible... I'm sure that she never meant any of it to sound mean or evil. But this is a writers site, and when people post here, they basically expect it to be picked apart so that the mistakes can be ironed out and fixed to make the piece all the better. We're not trying to knock you down, we're simply trying to help... Please keep that in mind when you're reading our responses to your work, because we are really only trying to help you out.

As for my response to this poem, I really can't say anything that hasn't already been said. I didn't find it very captivating and I think you forced things into it that just made it worse. You really didn't do the thoughts behind it justice, and I think you could do alot better.

As harsh as all that may sound, remember, we're here to help...

Ok..I just need to say a few more things and then I will be done. Ok you are one year older than me so you don't have every little skill to make something perfect, I'm not trying to sound immature or like a little kid. But hey this was a quick write and my friend and I were bored so we wrote this. I have seen alot of writings like this on the YWS so I'm not the only one who could use a few adjustments....its not all that easy to take some of the words people say. Especially when you've spent alot of time working on them. I love the help don't get me wrong but I also need a little like niceness when it comes to helping. I know I need to be able to except the fact that some people won't like every little thing I write down, and I understand that. Because I know there are some poems/stories out there that I don't like all that much either. But if you could help in a way that isn't so critical I would appreciate that. But if you are just gonna be a stuck up snob about it. Then I really don't want the help.

I just needed to say that. And I need to say Im sorry for being so snotty about it. I should have just said thanks. Like you said and carried on with my life.

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Kaitlyn

kutestuff003 wrote:I don't care wether you like it or not....I wrote it because all of this is true I may sound like a 2 year old but when it comes to reality I'm probably more mature than you are.

kutestuff003 wrote:I don't care wether you like it or not....I wrote it because all of this is true I may sound like a 2 year old but when it comes to reality I'm probably more mature than you are.

I know who it is about lalalalalalalala
Although I can really relate it to two people (if you take out the fat hog thing)
I liked this but the rhmyes were forced and that kind of drove me a bit nuts. that's it though. YAY GREENPEACE!

you wrote this? well i'm not going to say anything about it just that i don't like rhyming poems and stuff so yeah i can't really say anyhting about it

I don't care wether you like it or not....I wrote it because all of this is true I may sound like a 2 year old but when it comes to reality I'm probably more mature than you are.

First of all, welcome. Second, this was horrible. Let me be the first to say it. Expect it from others, cause that's what's coming.

kutestuff003 wrote:You think your all that,
You think your a star,
But when it comes to reality,
Thats not what you are.

You laugh like a hyhena,
You look like a dog,
But when it comes to reality,
Your just a fat hog.

You suck at school,
You fail every test,
But when it comes to reality,
Your just not the best.

You don't have the body,
You don't have the guy,
But when it comes to reality,
Your just like a fly.

You smell like garbage,
You look like it too,
But when it comes to reality,
You live in a zoo.

Your hair is greasy,
You need a bath,
But when it comes to reality,
Your a physco path.

You have more than one chin,
You have a fat face,
But when it comes to reality,
Your just out of place.

You need to leave Hazel Park,
You need to move on,
But when it comes to reality,
Your just like a con.

But when reality rolls around your just in the way. I don't have anymore to say.