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Hey. This is a really nice short story. It's very vivid and passionate - I like how the story is basically the narrator's thoughts, as it really allows the reader ...

Hey. Since English isn't your native language, I won't say anything about your grammatical mistakes/lexical choices. I thought this was an amazing short story. The metaphors and similes that you ...

Hey. This is a very good and interesting short story. I like how you've matched the weather with the atmosphere in the house, and you've done a very good job ...

Hey. I liked this story, it was quite thrilling in parts - I feel as if the description of the mother's dead body was very well done, and it was ...

Hey. This is a good story. I like how you've made it realistic by focusing on the day-to-day actions of the protagonist - it makes the story seem more believable ...

Hey. This isn't too long (since it's the prologue), so there isn't much I can say about it, but I'll try. First of all, I think what you have written ...

Hey. This is a very good story with a deep meaning. The protagonist's pain during the car collision was conveyed well with the wide array of descriptive words, and the ...

Hi. This is very well written. They way you foreshadowed what was to happen to her heart by saying "... to mend the piece of our hearts that was broken ...

Hi. This is a very good short story - it doesn't have any wasted passages, and the feelings and thoughts of the MC are conveyed clearly, so I can easily ...