mystogan

I knew it, I knew it, the othir were a bunch of idiots always making choices that no one will like, just look at the ending, they actually found a ...

woah, complete turn around and here i was making predictions from the previous chapter, seriously some great stuff...where to begin 1. i like twist in the plot, it is very ...

I think this was good but maybe it could be have been longer. You could have extended the suffering part showcasing all the ways in which suffering is there and ...

quite an interesting story, very peculiar, the concept i mean. To be honest this has left me expecting for a few more details. You have discussed his feelings as a ...

Great chapter, its very interesting especially how you move the plot on whilst also developing the feelings between them. Wierdly i feel like i know Leo more than Ryder even ...

The story is well written, i can actually picture these people and i can picture the scenes. Seriously, there is some great writing going on and amazing descriptions. The characters ...

This is the first chapter i have read of this novel and i have to say it is quite interesting. It is not my type of novel escpecially with the ...

Your instructions are not for the simple minded. Take me for example, i make a lot of mistakes so if you are giving instructions you should make sure they are ...

I agree with the previous comments. This is a better poem than an essay or article. It would therefore do much better tagged as a poem. Having said that i ...

The poem is actually pretty amazing but i think you should stick to one thing. In the first stanza you give away exactly what it is you are feeling. However ...

When you say things like [chorus] and stuff i think you should make sure you actually separate them. These kind of things actually get a boost from the way they ...

It is really interesting but i think you should make it longer, especially considering how there is a lot of dialogue. Also i think you should describe the characters more. ...

I like it but because a lot of it is dialogue, i think you should make it a little bit longer