myjaspercat

oh, and Emily was his sister

Thank you I'm glad you like it. I will go back and add in those commas. I'm also glad you thought the dialogue was realistic, it's hard as a girl ...

thank you, yeah it's been a while since I've written any form of a story. Sorry bout the can't' thing, my computer doesn't point them out or fix them. I'm ...

your welcome. And its nice that you are starting to write free verse, I personally prefer it since it lets me have more freedom, I think you'll like it.

thank you for your review

Thank you for the review, I greatly appreciate it. For one I really didn't have an underlying message here, I just kind of wanted to write a poem where someone ...

your welcome

haha, thanks I guess I wasn't really thinking about what I was typing.

I think that stanza you wrote, fits in with the rest of the poem. The style matches so you are good their.

the shift enter is what I learned and it works for me. (personally I use the shift underneath the enter on my laptop) I would suggest trying it a couple ...

Well, I write a lot of poetry, so it became faster for me in reviewing them. Anyways, I hope I helped. (P.S. I'm also at my grandmothers and she lives ...

Your welcome for the review, and I'm sorry I may not have made myself clear, I wasn't saying that being a dog wasn't cool, I kind of meant that it ...

your welcome, any time

I see your points. One thing though that really bothered me was the whole 'not rhyming is lazy' thing. That's not true, in fact it is harder at times to ...

I'm glad I could help. To improve on tenses really is to just continue reading and writing. After you do write something make sure that you reread but read it ...