moonpolice

I do understand where you're coming from. This piece needs an editing overhaul. I use humor because the truth of what happened to me before I left organized religion and ...

I've made some changes and made it longer. It's probably still not perfect, but I am setting up for a scene at the hospital, which is much more descriptive and ...

Thank you for reading. I'm doing a serious overhaul edit on this piece and definitely taking a lot of what you said into consideration. In regards to which Christians I'm ...

I love love poems. It's kind of a guilty pleasure of mine. This poem is really beautiful and well written, and the language is timeless. I think it fits into ...

You have some really good points, and I've taken them all into consideration. This is just a prologue, and the actual story is written in a first person point of ...

Thanks so much! I actually really like when people nitpick my writing, because I have a really bad habit of writing too fast and not going back to look for ...

Thanks for all your feedback. I really appreciate it. I do need to work on my flow, which is hard for me, since I type the way I talk a ...

Hey! Thanks for all your input. Chapter three is actually finished and sitting in my documents, but I'm in the process of editing it. Like you and several other people ...

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This took my breath away. I'm honestly so excited for any future chapters. This was a really good twist on a story about aliens (which I am always a fan ...

Thanks so much for your advice. I'll take it into consideration, both in editing and in writing in my next chapters. I hate to burst your bubble, but Lake is, ...

Hey, Socks! Thanks so much for your reply. I read the whole thing, and I will absolutely take your advice into consideration. I'm currently working on Chapter 2. I'm hoping ...