Hey there! MJ stopping by for a short review
I don't see how this enables her to have a meltdown.I had left my job at the hospital to meet Neil for dinner, so I was able to have a meltdown on the side of the road behind the wheel of my own car
They had met for dinner and it was nearly midnight? That means they would have stayed at the restaurant for at least 5 or 6 hours, which isn't really believable and seems like a plot hole.I looked at the dashboard clock. It was nearly midnight. When had it gotten so late? “Yeah, okay. I’m on my way.”
I also didn't really like the declaration of love at the end. Since we don't know the proposer very well, and since they talk to each other like colleagues, the "I love you" seemed really abrupt, and I don't think this is the best place to put it. It might be better to drag this out for a while and reveal that later, so that you're not throwing in too many twists and turns to keep the reader engaged.
I do like the premise of a couple looking for divorce, the man pursuing it and the woman not quite ready to accept it, and then a love triangle opens up between the husband, wife, and co-worker. However, that is a pretty common plot, so what would make this more original? Why should I read this and not another romance novel right next to it? What about this will draw me in?
So I'm going to leave you with that and wish you a good day and happy writing, since I think I"ve given you some good points to consider. As always, if you have any questions or need me to give you a bit more information on a point, clarify something, explain my meaning, literally anything, just shoot me a PM or post something on my wall or reply to this review! I hope this was helpful for you, and have a wonderful rest of your evening
Best wishes & RevMo cheer,
MJ
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