mizz-iceberg

It's an awesome poem Monki. The imagery, the flow and the words are just right. I rather liked the repetition of "Let's run rampant through the city." Sadly, I don't ...

I really liked the poem. I would rather fly with the birds then spend my life wishing I had wings, Don't worry about that line, it makes sense. And it's ...

I loved how you started the poem. It flowed well and it was interesting. From the sixth stanza, I found it repetitive and boring. Instead of flowing like it did ...

I absolutely loved this poem! You not once used the word God, or Higher Power, or fate or karma or any of those, yet you gave us a sense of ...

Hmm... the poem was very strong and understood right away what you were getting at. Nice choice of words by the way. However I didn't like the format too much. ...

Hello, there! New Member, I see. Well welcome to YWS! :D Alright, I'm going to get right to your writing. I have attached my critique. Just click on download and ...

Hello Oye! I have to say I really like this. It's a great way to begin something, but I do hope as this processes we see a little less internal ...

Welcome to YWS! I see that you are a new member! ;) It would a good idea to introduce yourself in the Welcome Forum. In case you don't know YWS ...

Hello Rawr. I think your poem has potential but it needs some serious work. There is a lot of navel-gazing going on. For further explanation check out Snoink's article. Another ...

Hahha. Veryu amusing. I laughed out loud in a couple of placed. ..Miserella... hahaha! She’d seen him around town a few times, always posing and smiling. Once she’d caught him ...

*Applauds* I love Jo and I am beginning to like Connor too. Jo reminds me slightly of Hermione Granger. And I really like that Conner acts as if he's all ...

Salaams Sam! I'll echo everyones comments before and say that I loved this. The descriptions were great! Everything flowed so well. I also liked the random humor. It kept me ...

ZOMG ZOMG! This reminds me of one of my favourite songs by NAtasha Bedingfield. It's called Soul Mate and I highly, highly reccemond you to listen to the song, read ...

The Problem I love the plot. The story, the whole outline is great! However that's what it is right now just a plot. Your piece looks more like a detailed ...

Hello! This is fresh, touching piece. I'll just first go through the nitpicks quickly... They say that legend often becomes fact, so before my reputation is completely ruined I want ...