mizz-iceberg

It's all going too fast and gets confusing. Maybe you should try and space out your writing. "Cold surrounds me, envelops me, cradles me in its deceiving arms. Long icy ...

Wow. This is beautiful. I found the emotions very vivid and the whole piece flowed very nicely. " I myself felt resigned to it as well, and I had thought ...

Great imagery and vivid descriptions. my eyes begin to feel like they weigh a million pounds Love that line! Read this phrase slowly and loudly: I look down at my ...

Kitty15 has pretty much pointed out all the mistakes that I noticed. & and thank you so much for PM-ing!! I didn't know this chapter was up... I was a ...

Sorry it took me so long to getting to read your poem. But I finally did and I have to say I agree Sureal, it's definitely an improvement from Rapunzel's ...

How about Glossed lips? Yes I have o agree with the above that this piece was excellent. What I really like about this is it's nice and short and simple. ...

I agree with Gwenevire. it would be nice if you space out your writing into nice small paragraphs. You are turning off a lot of writers as It's hard on ...

OMG Evangelina, this is awesome! I had tears in my eyes while reading. I have nothing at all to crit about. I'm just so dazed and I realize what you ...

Haha this one was wayy funnier. I love your sense of humor. Something I can't really get into my writing. However I have tried to write comedy Check it out ...

Haha, funny and original. I laughed and said, “Oh you stupid knight! Always telling us how we look! I am not as blonde as you think! I can cook!” I ...

Ok I altered quite a few things in your 'story'. Chapter 1: "Well here we are," said John, the leader of this group. "Yeah, but we stick out like a ...

Ahh. More!! Post more. Waitaing for the next chapter. You really got me there. I thought David was kidnapping her for his own purposes...but it turns out it's for some ...

Really enjoyed this! You've written about a very common feeling that comes to most middle aged women entering their fifties. Their need to know if they are still as attractive ...

It says so many reviews because it's also counting the replies you posted yourself. hehe. It's too short right now, but I like it! great descriptions! I see you are ...

I like how you ended your poem. Great descriptions and characterizations. one line that seemed odd to me: This girl looks like shy type, This girl looks like the shy ...