miyaviloves

Oooh i liked this, very catchy rhythm to it! I have read a few of your poems today and this one i like the best! Well done keep it up! ...

Wow quick replies! thankyou both! Alainna - glad you are enjoying Ice Cubes! And I'm glad that you keep reviewing and giving advice, it meas a lot to me! MB ...

this has potential to be something really good, keep working at it, add in little things here and there and you have something really great to work with! Good luck! ...

i think all the corrections and stuff have been pointed out to you and such here, well done i liked it :) Keep it up! Meevs x

this was so sweet and romantic! You used repetition well, sometimes it can sound overly repetative, but you used it to your advantage here, well done! Much love! Meevs x

This is ok, work at it, thats all i can say really..... Sorry that was pretty useless :P Meevs x

Yay i really liked this! I look forward to seeing how you make this progress, and how you adapt it, but its great so far! Meevs x

I guess that all that needs to be said has been said here! I really enjoyed this, its a great beginning, and it really gets you into the story quick, ...

I also very much liked this! I was drawn to the title, Kismet is a Indian resturant near where i live hehe! Anyway, this was extremly good, keep up the ...

I loved this! especially the ending! And...I have nothing more to say (I'm tired, to otired for long crits atm lol) Meevs x

I think you did well, haikus seem difficult to write even though they are very short, so i congragulate you on that! Good luck with thew rest of your work! ...

Hello both :) Alainna - The door thing does have quite a big importance, but you will find that on in later chapters, I too thought it was a little ...

FANTASTIC!!! Awwwwwwww. Is he going to get in touch with Chris and Rob??? You will have to wait and see :P Jaimiy (Did I spell that completely wrong??) Jamiy :D ...

I can only really echo what Kylan has said! I really loved this, its unique and your writing style is amazing, keep this up, you are very talented! Meevs xxx

I have to agree with Clau, it did sound a little bit thrown together like. But don;t get me wrong, there is something here, if you work at it you ...