These are only three lines each. And when there are spaces, it is the end of the haiku. Enjoy!
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Cold winter turning
Flowers blooming, buds sprouting
Spring has sprung alive
Weeping clouds of Spring
April showers bring May flowers
Sweet grass greens in Spring
The cold is gone now
The shining sun welcomes us
Be happy, be free
Crickets sing tonight
Toads and frogs are burping too
Listen till it's light
Yes, death and despair
Misery, war, and battle
They are all awful
Nature is even here
Look at the sky, the clear sky
God has made things good
Praise be to the Lord
Not to idles or to man
The praise be to God
The mountains are high
The valleys are low and dark
The trees reach the sky
Moonbeams on water
Shining and glistening here
Ripples make them dance
The moons radiance
Sparkles on the tips of trees
Shining a path way
Snoozing, slumbering
To night sleep has come
As the moon watches
Be at rest my dear
Listen to the rain, the wind
And the thunder too
Wind rustles the trees
Making the leaves fall slowly
Landing near by here
The sun welcomes us
The sun rays dance around us
Summer days have come
The sun screeches down
The boiling sun sits high
Staying there, very long
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I think you did well, haikus seem difficult to write even though they are very short, so i congragulate you on that!
Good luck with thew rest of your work!
Meevs
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This is nice; the only thing that I would suggest is that you make the haikus flow more with each other because it seemed to me that they were all coalescing into something. For example, the first three seemed like you were describing the seasons in order then it seemed like you were describing a part of the season. In other parts it seemed like your were describing the time of day. Try to make it clear what you are stringing togetherl other than that, good job.
These...weren't particularly good.
They didn't seem to convey any...message.
They were just seemingly random images.
But then again, haikus aren't exactly my strong point
Um....thanks? What does "do it" for you? Well, I don't know what to say.
-- M.B.Author
It was OK, but I didn't care for them. Haikus just don't do it for me.
TG