miyaviloves

Hmm, this is ok, but I'm not sure if i personally like it all that much. I like the repetition, that works well. But i thin kyou could evoke a ...

I thought that i had commented this but i just realised i went onto another web page and forgot to post it! Oops! Anyway as i was saying in my ...

Wow, i really liked this, but im not sure if you should extend it, unlee you feel you have more to say? Im not one to point out problems with ...

Ok i really like this :D However, is this a second aprt of like have i missed some of it?? Im a bit confused with all the characters, like Orpheus ...

How how how how HOW did i miss part two?!?! *goes to read it*. Ok i am back :D. Rightyho, First things first, i LOVE this, ohhh yess i do! ...

Hmm, In all fairness I'm not too sure if i liked this as much as your other stuff. You used the word 'wall' too much in the first bits of ...

I like how this is talking to the reader, and the topic is good, but i feel that some of the lines are a little cliche such as: To ease ...

I agree very much with Liz, this isnt particulary poetic, although I'm not one to talk I'm terible with poetry! Even so, i didnt really enjoy reading this in all ...

Well, you seem to have loads of reviews on this already, but since i read it i will say my peice :D Ok, i wont point out mistakes now as ...

Only thing wrong Skell has pointed out here. I really like this, its original and i think it was quite heartfelt, i wasnt too sure if that was what you ...

strait - straight :D And Seth :) one of my favourite names. Ok, this is good, but the first part sounds a bit like "and he did this, then this ...

I liked this, althought when reading ijust one line didnt seem to flow: The salty sea smell is carried in the air I dont know why, maybe i am reading ...

This is very descriptive and i really like it, your a very talenter writer. I dont know why or if i should but i have taken an instant dislike to ...

Right first things first: I herd the... herd should be heard. touches on the cake like the, ‘ I love you honey ‘ Icing written around the edge of the ...

This is a good start, and it has potential for something good. I would have liked to have seen some more description of the characters in the first part, unless ...