miyaviloves

I hope she dosen't abort the baby, i dunno i think she already has a connection with it so i dont think she will. I like the flashbacks you put ...

I agree with BFG, you have been posting a lot recently, and this is not a problem atall as long as you keep to the two posts to everyone of ...

I like how you write with such emotion, but I dunno, I didnt really like this very much. I think its a little cliche, i may be wrong. But i ...

Ok, i will be honest,i did not read all of this, can you separate it up anymore? It would be much easier to read that way. Even so, i LOVE ...

Hmm, this is strange lol. What exactly is it, dont mean to sound rude? Is it part of a story or is it just something you felt like writing? What ...

Ok, i liked this, but this may sound a little weird, you could make it a bit longer and use more 'claustrophobic' words...if you get me there? I had an ...

hmm it was a bit short I would like to have seen a bit more, it was good but i think that this could have been longer and a lot ...

Ok, i liked this, but one line annoyed me just ever so slightly and that was: Because my cushion is too wet, When i first read it, i was like...whhhat? ...

Great, this is very very good! I am also, along with Mimi waiting for chapter 2, your characters are developing nicely and you have a very nice vocabulary range :D ...

:O ...wow..... :O! lol very good peice of work you have here, very sad :( definalty a topic that i think more people need to writeabout, maybe need to write ...

Is this about Micheal jackson, I'm guessing so :D hmm just take Shadows advice about the random capitals and the number 2 and well its good! I like your poetry, ...

Aww thats sad :( And i can relate to this, maybe thats why i like it so much. The rhyming works in places such as: A small child wakes, crying ...

Right, this is really good and its a very good start, i want to read more! I like the transistion (is that the right word?) From the first person speaking ...

Right well i think Elven and Writersdomain have said all that really needs to be said, but hey i loved this! And that is all i need to say so ...

Right, well i have not read any of the other chapters so i wont comment on like any progression because i simply do not know about it! :D Ok, first ...