mikepyro

Hmm, see I really enjoyed this piece. More than I expected. You have nice detail and a solid sense of voice that flows throughout here. My major problem was that ...

Time for me to link two reviews together, aww yeah! I really enjoyed this piece , much more than I did your piece Sin. While both are very well written ...

I agree the piece has fantastic flow and voice brought to life with emotion and pain. The lines flow one to another without really tripping over themselves even as I ...

"You make yourself the victim," you hissed at me. You were my sister, and stayed by my side rarely. But it's not like you're a martyr either. And you say ...

Gotta agree with the idea of the tears. I think if she didn't cry it would feel a whole less melodramatic. Maybe they just well up at the end? I ...

This is a very unique piece. Honestly, I truly enjoyed it. There's heart and depth to the words in spite of the humorously quirky undertones. Far too often pieces try ...

It's a decent story, some genuine points of emotion break in through the story of the mom. I feel the story is both too short and too long in that ...

Much better than I'd expected. Powerful and structured so well. You create a very proffesional style and a restrained voice that runs through the piece. I really felt you kept ...

Not bad. You have some points where you bunch up she did this then she did that and she saw kind of lines. These don't pull me in and read ...

Not bad. It's much better than the general crop of dark poetry on here. I loved how you poured your voice into this and kept the strength of the writing ...

Really liked it. Simplistic, perhaps too short, as very little is given for us to latch onto. That said, I love that the story is one of death without ending ...

hmmm....I like it. Very simplistic and stylized, yet it gives clear emotion and beauty in its words. I must say that I don't care for the last two lines, I ...

It is almost sickeningly cute lol. Most cute poems try and swing by on mediocre rhymes and sunshine but you add a little touch of darkness like the best childrenlike ...

I found the Lack of punctuation a bit distracting as the piece isn't about the scarce emotion or voice but rather the overall beauty of the imagery you paint. I ...

A rather short song bit perhaps best due to the darker nature of the piece. I find that some of the rhymes are a bit iffy when rea aloud, however ...