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Hey. Just so you know, you have at least six things posted on the first page of this forum. Maybe, if you didn't post quite so much you'd get more ...

Hey, this was pretty good. On with the review... Why was it she felt her heart sting every time she saw a happy family. Okay, this sentence confused me a ...

Hey Shadow! I'm going to review your story for you! But it ended up being the worst dummer of my entire life. I think you meant "summer." :wink: She was ...

Hi, Marnie! I'm going to review your story now.... :D The one where the victim would be running in the opposite direction of his murderer. With fresh bleeding scars along ...

Hello! I'm here to review your story. Grammar I didn't see many grammar errors. There may have been a few that I missed, but nothing too drastic. :wink: Characters I ...

It's the only logical expanation for why I feel this way. With my whole body feeling broken and bruised I couldn't possibly be alive. Please capitilize the 'I''s, that's first ...

I died on September 17th, 2007. Just wanted to say that this is a nice opening sentence. It keeps the reader wanting to read more. But , sometimes , how ...

Wow. I usually don't read non-fiction but this is really good. I can't believe this is true because that's just awful that someone would do that to you. I didn't ...

I'm not going to do any grammar fixes I just wanted to say that this was very well written and it flowed really nicely. It was so sweet and I ...

I didn't hate it. I just thought it was a little...weird? The guy sparkled, Bella "loved" that. I would find that really creepy! Edward was too perfect, Bella was too ...

I think Music got all of the grammar mistakes. I think this was a good start and I agree that the first paragraph was better then the second. I think ...

It was nice. You know that feeling you get when you see a cute guy on the street, and he sees you, and smiles; the butterfly feeling? That’s the feeling ...

She was s ick and tired of the contrasting swishing and swirling of emotions that roiled through her. Not only did it rush through her head but it even had ...

Hey! This was really nice and well written. My only grammar complaint is that you tend to use long sentences like... I crave the smell of chlorine in bright water, ...

"My name is Bethany." She started, folding her hands in her lap. She gave a nervous glance around the room, and felt uncomfortable. Everyone in the room was glaring. They ...