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  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: First Taste

    So, pretty much I have no life right now and I saw this had no reviews so I'm going to review it for you. Sound good? Great! :) He closed ...

    Mar 8, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: another side (temp. title)

    Hey, I really enjoyed reading this! I loved the emotion, that was really great. I don't have much to say, I'm not good with grammar unless it's completely obvious that ...

    Sep 20, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Forbidden Love; Chapter 1.

    Hey. This was an interesting idea and I enjoyed reading it. I don't want to go into grammar details, but there are a few things I had problems with. Well, ...

    Aug 10, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Nw story, need help please!

    I like the way you write; you have a nice writing style. But, maybe you could try to make it a little more original. I feel like I've already read ...

    Jul 28, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Rising Above It Steel (2

    I wish I could give you some totally in-depth review, but I'm really no good at that. And honestly, I didn't see many grammatical errors. This story is very sad. ...

    Jul 26, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: New_Story_Exerpt

    I like it, I only have one thing. It took me awhile to figure out how old Lucas might be. At first I thought he was at least fifteen. And ...

    Jul 24, 2009
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Ellen Hopkins

    I think that the new one comes out sometime at the end of August. I think, don't take my word for it. But, anyways, I absolutely love her books. I ...

    Jul 15, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Fiction

    Hey, I didn't find many grammar problems with this. Only a few: This is the first time I have ever rode a rollercoaster [add comma] and the first time I ...

    Jul 8, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Emma-Claire

    Hey, Peanut! I was genuinely excited because I wanted something to review and I came along this. So, here it goes: Nitpicks The flurries whirled around me ; Josh circled ...

    Jun 25, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: I'm Yours

    Hi, Sakura! I'm here to review your work today. So, here you go :): He said, running a hand through his perfect blonde surfer hair. Never say perfect. I don't ...

    Jun 24, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: My Sole Reason For Suicide [Chapter One. Kitten]

    Hey, Master. I guess I should say welcome to YWS and I'm going to review this for you. :) I'll give you some grammar nitpicks and then some feedback at ...

    Jun 18, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Summer's Gone

    Hey, beccax! I really, really enjoyed reading this. It was full of emotion and it was very sad, I felt it, that was good. There weren't many things that I ...

    Jun 17, 2009
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Twilight

    I loved the Twilight series! I can't believe all you people. Maybe there were some things wrong with it, but can ya'll write like that and then sell a lot ...

    Jun 16, 2009
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Worst Book You've Ever Read

    Elsewhere , by Gabrielle Zevin. Oh, I read that book, Evi. My mom got it for me. I agree, I didn't really care about the characters and the end was ...

    Jun 6, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Hurtful smiles

    Hey. I think June got most of the errors. And, I don't really have any either. I have to say I really liked this and I hope you expand on ...

    May 31, 2009


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