melodicatastrophe

I reall enjoyed reading this. It was vivid and well-written; although at some points I found myself stumbling over the words. I suggest reading this out loud, the syllables in ...

Cute! I really enjoyed reading this, and I hope to read more of your work. I smile, and daydream, while spying on their conversation. I'm not sure how 'spying' would ...

I agree with Suzanne. The first stanza could be removed as it tells the entire poem's idea at the beginning! It could do well without it. I suggest adding more ...

I agree with Dream Deep, I have never reviewed your work simply because I could not understand most of it. But this, this is great work. It's so much different ...

I really liked this, though I agree with Tess, much of the poem's rhyming was quite forced. Forced rhyming always does no good for the poem's flow in reading, especially ...

Ahh, I can't believe I wrote that long crit and it got deleted =( Anyways, I'll write a shortened version of it. If you want the longer version, I'll rewrite ...

I did not like this very much. It was short, uninteresting, and I'm not going to remember it in five minutes, much less tomorrow. I'm not trying to be harsh ...

I must say, this poem was over-ridden with over-used cliches and choppy sentences. That's what I read...just sentences. The lines in this poem made no affect of me at all, ...

First of all, welcome, nothingface. Secondly, you may need to spell-check from time to time. The spelling and punctuation I have added in or changed is outlined in bold in ...

It's clever, indeed! Nice idea, and you did it pretty well. Although I liked the poem, I do agree partially with something euclidean. In some places I didn't understand the ...

Beautiful poem, but it can use a look-over. In the first stanza, I feel the words "moon" and "river" is overused. It disrupted the rhythm and flow of the poem. ...

Although it's been said a few times, I agree with the fact that this poem was way too jumpy. Like kitty15 said, I really like the first two lines. The ...

I like this poem a lot, but as the other posters really does need a lot of work. A good idea would be to read the poem out loud to ...