mellophone7

I honestly just loved this. It really goes in deep with a relationship with God, and it's fun to read, because you have dialogue between two different people, one a ...

Haha, I love this! I can totally relate to it! I have just a few comments and suggestions to make. There once was a young girl, smart and slick . ...

I love this, and I also cannot believe that this is one of your first poems. I did notice a few errors, but I think that everybody already covered them. ...

I honestly did not notice that the first, fourth, seventh, and tenth lines were connected until I read it for, like, the third time. Of course, I read this at, ...

The way you went into detail, but not too much, left you wondering why he wanted to kill someone. The last line that shows he's human, and he felt some ...

I really liked this. I haven't seen the movie Titanic, either, (although I know one of my friends has), but I knew almost immediately what you were talking about. It ...

This is a good starting point for a poem. I think that the flow (as mentioned before) could probably be cleaned up a little bit, because it seemed to jump ...

In a sad way, this reminds me of America, almost, because we're so focused on the outer appearance of a person, and not what's inside, and the people who have ...

This is a very good poem, and, as stated before, it does describe life very well. I will mention that you did stretch the rhyming at some points in the ...

Hi! I liked this, but I'm still the kind of person who, when I see a bug, will squash it. It's good, though! Just a few things: This deed is ...

I love this poem. This is my absolute favorite stanza. The pen is my instrument. Words are my music. The world and more Are my inspiration. I am a poet. ...

Yay for you! This got featured!! :) I've only been a member for two months now, and I got two of my poems featured recently, too, so I was very ...

I loved this, MOIMOW. The rhyming was pretty good overall, and any mistakes I found were already pointed out to you by the first reviewer. I loved the last stanza, ...

I like this. The only thing is, I was a bit confused by the fact that she seemed to be putting a star inside of her, and then she's talking ...

Wow. This is beautiful. I didn't find any mistakes in it that I could see, and the flow seems pretty sound. Just one thing. |L|asting without you is the hardest ...