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wow, i really like this. it took a second reading to figure it out. it has to totally suck for them, but it was their choice. And I must’ve screamed ...

DO NOT ENTER I warn you, beware You’re entering the room of a teenage girl Her private domain, her forbidden lair If you come in unannounced She will snap around ...

this was great written in prose, your feelings for your sister are genuine. I like how you chose to write this. I do agree if you were to go back ...

I really liked this, i wouldnt remove all the lines "God Knew we needed someone." It is a statement you are making with each paragraph. It flowed well and the ...

This started out very good, I felt the the first and the last stanza let us know you were talking about writing. The middle two were just discriptions that took ...

This is a very solid poem. no catchy rymes. I personally don't like the ryming as much. I do like the subject matter you chose to write on. It is ...

I have a hard time with your comment Gadi. Being mean to people to help them? Isn't that an oxymoron? People can critique, but do you really have to show ...

I have read this chapter when it was first posted. I had to come back and reread it, due to the controversy it seems to have created. Which is a ...

All nine trees found ( you need to be more specific, why were they lost?) low on this high infinity ( this in no way ties in with the trees. ...

what to say. i really like the poem. half way thru i figured out who "Me" is. that changed the way i read it, so i had to go back ...

this was a good read. only i dont see it as a type of love affair, as i see it, it has to do with losing someone like a friend. ...

i see you just posted this, any chance of letting me know when you post. so i dont have to constantly check. this one weirded me out. its not something ...

i noticed only a few grammar errors, in the 4th paragraph you misspelled bridle, (bradle) also you rushed through the part when the girl gets bucked off, and then just ...

this ch lacks the excitement of the last one, but it has me intrigued as to where you are taking it. i did not even look for errors, as i ...

wow, this one grabbed me from the beginning, for your first time i will go easy. some of your paragraphs could be combined into the sentence. it seems to broke ...