lucyy

Wow!! I love this, it leaves me wanting to read more ... & I so wish I could write like you! Its breathtaking .. seriously ... :shock: I'm off to ...

Thanks for PMing me on posting this piece & again I enjoyed it! Here are my critiques, I hope it helps .... The library showed [s]it's[/s] its age This place, ...

Here we go .. hope this helps ... “Patricia…” I began but I think there was hardly any voice that came out. Right, 'hardly any voice' sounds wrong. Try something ...

Wow, I really liked this & am hooked!! I can't think of anything for you to improve it & it slightly confuses me so I start questioning it, which is ...

Wow, I really like this & am intrigued in which direction the story will go from here. I liked the shortness of this chapter & it didn’t seem rushed either, ...

I’m really enjoying this & I really can’t think of anything really major for improvement. The word document points out a few grammatical & wording errors & I also felt ...

Ooh, I’m really liking this!! There are a few grammatical & wording errors that I have pointed out in the document, but otherwise the emotions & thoughts & suspense are ...

This is really good & there’s lots of emotions from your MC which is great . Also, I like the way you are differing from past to present, it keeps ...

Merry_Haven, Having read your preface to this, I have read over this & enclosed a document for you with critique etc. First of all: wow! You have a real good ...

I quite liked this & thought it was a good start, but I think you need to add more scenery & thoughts & feelings & emotions etc, all that boring ...

I really enjoyed this & the ending was the best part which really caught my attention!! You have a real knack for drawing in the readers attention, so much so ...

I have enclosed this document, giving you a few pointers & because I'm too lazy I haven't had a look at the other comments, so I may be repeating what ...

I have enclosed a document with critiques in it. I hope it helps you out & if you have any questions to ask or anything then just PM me :) ...

You have really grabbed my attention & got me wanting to read more!! I think that this is really good & enjoyable & the only critiques I had in the ...

I don't really know what to say, but I do think you have the writing style to do a prologue & i think that that one is a good one ...