lostthought

I am a little late on this but welcome to YWS! I am here to review you on out our first story. 1. Grammar- as said by the person below ...

Review time! Yayyyyyy. Just so you know, I don't review unless you already have one review. So far I am liking the story. I read it when it first came ...

Now that you have one review, I can review you. 1. Spelling errors- here is a small list of examples you need to fix Pear--> pair Front--> from 2. Punctuation ...

Well the green room stinks. Time you get you out. I didn't see anything wrong that wasn't mentioned but I do have comments 1. Are Reuben and Orville both boys? ...

I have read your other chapters. You could of just made the last thing chapter 2 and this could've been chapter 3. I saw no capitalization errors, no punctuation errors, ...

I don't know why I am disturbed. I like creepy pasta but I don't read them a lot. You have good description but there are some things that you need ...

I don't know why but people forget to say this. Also I don't know the date so I guess welcome to YWS! You need some improvement badly but since this ...

What teacher gave you this prompt? I didn't know these prompts were possible. Well I'll review you before I leave. This is hard and I keep losing my focus so ...

I wonder why all the sentences were all spaced out. Strange..... I almost said welcome to YWS for some reason. There was some punctuation mistakes as mentioned below. I didn't ...

That was awesome. Is that your only work? I would love to read more. I wonder how she could see in her dark room. I am one for horror stories ...

Hey, here to review. It would help if you posted the contest rules. You have been on this site for a while have you not? I think the first may ...

I didn't see anything too horrible for grammar. I honestly don't do anything about grammar if it is the person thinking. I mean really, this is a human being. They ...

This will be my final review for an hour or two. I'm here to get you out of the green room. I have already read your first chapter and is ...

Hi. I ask here to review and kick you out of the green room. First off, I would like to say that it doesn't seem like rated 16 to me. ...

I have read the rest of the chapters and I wasn't disappointed with this chapter! I haven't commented on the rest of your chapters though. I have read a lot ...