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Re: Honeymoon in Mars - Episode4(The Romantic Drunkyard)
This seams like a play do to the way they are speaking. It needs some editing. Let's look at some nitpicks shall we? 1. 'He uttered a stupid poetry' Don't ...
Nov 21, 2013 -
Re: Tohiro.
Welcome to YWS! Hope you can stay for review day! This is just wordless. That is great for a newbie (not offense, just a fact that you are new). I ...
Nov 21, 2013 -
Re: The House of Diamonds
Nice, guess Twinkle Twinkle Little Star can be useful. This isn't going to be like my usually review so I'm going to do my best. I like this. It shows ...
Nov 21, 2013 -
Re: Snow: The Tale of a Cold Heart (Part II)
Welcome to YWS! A bit late but better late than never right? I am here to review! Capitalization- everything capitalized where it should be Punctuation- every end mark and extra ...
Nov 20, 2013 -
Re: Farewell darling
Like all poems this is hard to review. Let's see if I can do this. 1. Capitalization- this is a poem so I can't look at that unless you don't ...
Nov 20, 2013 -
Re: the stars are masters of deception
I am here to review. Weellll let's do this thing! 1. Capitalization- in poems, typically, the first letter in ever line is capitalized. In this it isn't but some poems ...
Nov 20, 2013 -
Re: Something I Need
Hi, here to review. 1. Spelling- nothing is misspelled here. 2. Punctuation- you have the right marks in the right places 3. Grammar- everything is grammatically correct (I feel as ...
Nov 20, 2013 -
Re: Music Man
This poem is a winter's snow, falling smoothly to the ground, creating a winter wonderland. Meaning: this poem is beautiful. It was simple and short. No complicated phrases and whatnot. ...
Nov 20, 2013 -
Re: Won't You Dance With Me?
Welcome to YWS! I read this and like most poems, it could be sung. Well since this a review, let's continue with the review! 1. Punctuation- personally I don't think ...
Nov 20, 2013 -
Re: Sandy and Shelly
Hi. Am here review! Yay a children's book! This needs pictures..... 1. 'It also had a beautiful shell, like its mother, Shelly.' You should make it ~It had a beautiful ...
Nov 20, 2013 -
Re: The War of Kingdoms
Hello I am here to review! So how do you do? 1. Punctuation- did you space? There is a space and the. A question mark. If you are ending a ...
Nov 19, 2013 -
Re: The Hybrids (chapter 4)
Warning: please help in the green room. I am here to review. For some reason I review all funny. 1. Capitalization- don't make me laugh. Nothing wrong here 2. Grammar- ...
Nov 19, 2013 -
Re: The Pact (Work In Progress)
This was hard to read. One because I have already read the edited version. Two because it is really really long. 1. Spelling- some things in here is misspelled. 2. ...
Nov 19, 2013 -
Re: Voice of Democracy, Audio Essay
I am here to review your very old item that is currently in the green room. If you are still here I hope you see this. 1. This was actually ...
Nov 19, 2013 -
Re: The Really Important Prolouge
Oh,you are new. Let me put on my 'IamsogladIgettogreetyoubecauseyouarenew' face. Welcome to YWS! I am here to review. Since you are new, you should know I only review if the ...
Nov 19, 2013