lordgluzman

It was interesting but..... It was toooooooooooo short for me. The only reason it looks to long is because you made huge space. But still you had a good point ...

You are a great American and God bless USA!!!!!!! Great poem but I think you should have maybe include some of the American history as well. Maybe you could write ...

Not bad but you could have done it longer. Then it be better!!! rite now you are just pooting in couple of words. But not bad keep on writeing.

Maybe it shouldn't be a poem, maybe it should be a dialogue or a script. But any ways lets get back to your writing itself. I think it was too ...

UM UM UM, It was OK for a new person. So keep on improving But the poem is to short. It gets a little bit boring because you are writing ...

LOL, that was so funny I showed to some of my freinds that went over to my house, they all said it was funny and coolio! Keep on writeing man, ...

I actually really like this as it is, even though some of the suggestions would add to it more. Did you write this for a band you are in or ...

I am on it!

PUNCTUATION....... Robert when you get back to Finland I'll make you punctuate your every last song and poem. :D I hope when I move back I will still live in ...

Where do u live? Haha! In England the standard price is £2 for one pill! Just saying :P No he is not British he is from Tennessee, Nashville .

My words treed me apart Pain came to my heart My tongue went beyond time My respect declined It went beyond time Memories stayed behind I just wanted to be ...

Thanks but I don't really know what then should I add.

WOW! pretty unique. Usually people don't right about this stuff. I don't really know if this is a poem or a Go Green Comercial. But if you really take this ...

This is really good. The adjectives are really well picked. But I didn't really get what is it about. If you can mail me and answer.