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Thank you! This is the kind of feedback I needed!

Hi! Thank you so much! I was also wondering about the length and was desperate for feedback! -Lolo

How do you sing like that!!! I bet ur super cool (u can sing AND play guitar)

Thank you! I just posted it without any editing for feedback. If possible, could you tell me what line breaks I could get rid of? Thank you for the review! ...

thank you! it makes more sense now. (I'll look at 13 reasons why):D

hello Do you mean what Radrook said to get rid of? the part that might make people sad?

Hello! Thank you for the review! I'll make sure to change the poem -Lolo

that is DEEP!! Honestly, i don't think im smart enough to think all of that stuff about my own poem! but i really enjoyed reading your review, it 1. make ...

hi! thanks for the review! Can you help me? I kinda intentionally put the grammar mistakes in their to make the syllable count match and the rhyming structure to stay ...

I completely agree. Thanks for the review!

Hi Kays! Thanks for the review. I don't know what a Ghazal is... Sorry! There isn't much to the poem, it's just a very simple, rhyming, "idea" that I needed ...

hi. It's called three two one because I didn't know what to call it, and i kept it that way because the first story was called three two one. You'll ...

Hi. Thanks for the review! Yeah, it's a pretty sucky piece. I was really bored. I completely agree with all your suggestions and I'll change a few things!

Hi Nymeria! Thanks for the review! Yeah, I think I made it very confusing, because other people said that too! Hmm... I'm going to answer a few questions first, so ...

If that comment sounded kinda harsh or cold, SORRY!!! I hope I didn't go too far or anything or insult you!!! Here's a better, more understandable comment: I just want ...