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I like the details you put in your poem. I also like how you described "The sap would ooze from the fresh wound." I am still a bit confused about ...

I really enjoyed your short story. I have almost no suggestions. But, when you write Ms.Kato, there's actually supposed to be a space after the period, like this, Ms. Kato. ...

I really love how emotional and dramatic this is! I have a few suggestions. In some parts of this, you are rhyming, but in the majority of the parts, you ...

I love how dark your short story was! But one thing I would do if I were you, is fix one of the words, "there" You said "there screams" I ...

I really liked your poem! It was very dark and sad. You could however, add some more details to further enhance the darkness of the poem. Also, in some parts, ...

I like how your poem is very realistic. But, I have several suggestions. firstly, the rhythm is a bit off and the rhyme is sometimes happening and sometimes not. Maybe, ...

I really liked your poem! I like how you connected it to real life problems of religion. The detail is also really helpful in showing the emotions of the character ...

I love how you wrote about how you should "Look to the sun when darkness follows you...". I also like how you had it a sort of structure for the ...

I love how you made this poem so sad. If I were you, however, I would add more detail and color to further enhance the pain the character is feeling. ...

I liked how you made a sort of message with the bold words, it's really creative! But, I have a few suggestions. I know it doesn't matter much, but it ...

I love how you put so much longing and regret into the poem to power it up! One thing I would suggest is maybe be a bit less repetitive. Also, ...