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lili024

  • Article / Essay » Literature, Realistic Re: Mersult's childhood

    Hi, galieu here! I really liked the Stranger when I read it last year, and part of me liking it was because of the almost equanimous tone Mersault had throughout ...

    Jan 29, 2017
  • Short Story » Horror, Mystery / Suspense Re: What one will do for love

    My skin is tingling. You are a talented writer, Elizabeth. When I read this, I kept think of ' The Tall-tale Heart' by Edgar Allan Poe. You make us realize ...

    May 28, 2012
  • Short Story » Realistic, Narrative Re: Grey Souls

    I'm going to recopy your story, and write my opinion in CAPITAL LETTERS.      I sat on my bag, in the same uncomfortable way I do every lunchtime since ...

    May 27, 2012
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Missing

    It is a good start. I like the idea, but you need to give more information. We don't know about her, or her mum. How long gas she been gone? ...

    May 27, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Nightfall~ Prologue

    Good! It is very good, Pixie. I'll write what I think in [brackets] In 1648 in Great Britain, A [ a shouldn't be capitalized] king was born. [I don't understand ...

    May 27, 2012
  • Lyrics » Humor, General Re: Country Cliche

    It's very good. You could upload the music sometime. I'd like to hear it. I like it how you say Country songs are lame in a country song. I'm not ...

    May 27, 2012
  • Short Story » Realistic, Teen Fiction Re: The Game

    This was a good story, but, just like mine, your story goes too fast. You should describe what happens before they enter the field, while in the field, and once ...

    May 14, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Christmas Tree

    Great Job! The only thing is why would any one burn a CHristmas tree!In the part when you say But I won't Find it in a gift shouldn't it be ...

    Dec 24, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Princess and Fairy Tales

    Yep you were is dark and silly, but good. You should write something like this but as a novel.I think they weren't any grammar mistakes, so practicaly it is all ...

    Dec 19, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General Re: The Magical Diary of L.L.P

    I really enjoyed it! You know I'm a Potter geek so you just made my day FUN! You should add Albus's letter in the next chappter, but the rest is ...

    Dec 18, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Mr Harry Potter, sir

    It is an Incredible poem! I LOVED IT SO MUCH! I am one of the biggest Harry Potter geeks ever so naturaly I

    Dec 17, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: In the Arms of a Warlock - Chapter Two

    It is a really good story.You should really continue that story.You made some mistakes: 1. . His black, wavy hair been cut short, should be :his black, wavy hair had ...

    Dec 15, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Hell's Forest: Chapter Two: Beginning

    Its really good! The name of the chapter cracked me up, but you did some mistakes. Like you say you are the prince's old friend and that he dissapeared two ...

    Dec 11, 2011


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