lilgreendots

“Large globs of melting chocolate ice cream dripped over my hand as I tried to lick it up as fast as I could. It didn’t work. The sweltering heat from ...

Basically, I wanna see how far I can go with this. Rated for it's content. Sorry for the lenght. Length not Lenght She had never even though thought of romance ...

A Shot of Arrogance ~ Chapter One The official page thingy for A Shot of Arrogance. Join and you get a monkey. :smt001 “The important thing about a problem is ...

Chapter 1, My saviour. I smiled as the sun's warm rays tickled my face, fighting off the cold fall air coming from my sister's open window. Lord knew why Emma ...

Well I didn't see any grammar responses so I'll just do and overall response. This was a great story and I liked how you used the point of view to ...

~CHAPTER 1. ~ She watch as the train started to leave the station. Tears poured down her face. Her cheeks and nose where rosy red. She put her hand down ...

Hey Carlito, TheTruthLiesWithin pretty much covered the grammar errors of the story so here's my response. The story is coming out very nicely. There is a lot of suspense and ...

Hey Bookgirl, walked to the door and opened the door; Keenan was leaning against the wall opposite the door. H straightened up when he saw me. This is just one ...

Hey Carls, It's me again :D .This was really good and I enjoyed reading it. It has gotten a lot better from your first story and there really isn't much ...

Hey Carls, Well first of all I'm sorry I'm so late with the reviews. With school starting and me starting seventh grade I haven't been paying very much attention to ...

Hi Carlito, Here's your review enjoy :D I thought everything sounded good. I had fun playing. These sentences seem sort of weak. You should combine them, and you should exchange ...

The vampire hissed at me, he was probably thinking I was after his prey. I turned to the human. Instead of saying he was just say probably thinking. I turned ...

Hello allmixedup, Here is your review enjoy You yourself have said no vampire is a match for me. I think it would be better to say You were the one ...

A lot of people already caught your other mistakes but I got a couple. Here is your review enjoy I smelt freshly cut grass by the forest, and the smell ...

Hello Writing Words This was so cute and fun to read. I can't believe you wrote this when you were six. My six year old brother couldn't write something as ...