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this is such a nicely written poem. it does so well when exploring the complexities of bearing responsibility to tend for another. to want to let this desire be yours ...

hello!! this is a great poem!! for the first stanza, i have to say this metaphor is so great to show her breaking point—the tears break the "dam", that is ...

hihi!!! GO SAPPHICS!!!!!! GO LESBIANS!!!!!! The concept of this story is quite interesting! Not only that but the dynamics are pretty compelling. We're introduced to this heaven that is oppressive ...

Hellooooo!!! This is a nice story, and has its compelling elements. The dynamics between the characters are pleasant—they flow together quite well. However, there are some awkwardness throughout the

Hello! This is such a great first part (or, chapter?) of this story. So many of the descriptions here, while simple, carries so much weight to them. This harsh world ...

Hello!! This is a nice piece, and its interesting qualities lies in the characters. My curiosity about some of the characters are sparked, though especially the one speaking. This character ...

hello! i also wanted to say good luck on your first novel! i will comment on all three of the chapters separately so i can stay more organized; i hope ...

first off HAPPY LATE BIRTHDAY!!! hope you have good times as a new adult! second off i really want to say that this is such a fun poem. like the ...

this is just so insanely creative, ive genuinely never seen anything like this on here. to just burrow from something so real, but at times fictional, but also popular and ...

this was an interesting read! i think one of the strongest pieces of this work is definitely the voice. it's authentic when it comes to writing a young, specifically preteen, ...

I would just like to say how much I love the language and writing! The descriptions are so lovely. While being so personal from the character, the writing remains to ...

Interesting concept of a short story! I also like the dialogue, plus some of the dynamics here like Clyde & Aaron. A few criticisms & concerns of my own: The ...

Interesting concept! I also liked some of the descriptions!!! Keep writing, there is so much potential. Immediately, the reader is introduced to a paragraph with run-on sentences, and general lack ...

"Sun And Shadows" is an interesting title for this story. While it does symbolize a dynamic forming between one character (Jaune) who has a more bigger, brighter personality & appearance ...

This story seem to be built on lots of world-building that I don't know, so instead of my thoughts being focused on those things, they will be more focused on ...