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Re: Forgotten (my first poem posted here)
Hi, Welcome to YWS! This the best site to post all your writing ideas. I only joined in January and I'm already in love with this site. So, this is ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: Wallpaper
Hi, I liked this poem. It was very interesting and different. I didn't get why he did it at the beginning, i liked how, (no offense) it was a stupid ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: I am Sixteen
Hi, Excellent job on this piece. Really good writing. There is not much for me to crit. I really wasn't expecting him to be a boy. I thought it was ...
Feb 11, 2008 -
Re: Waiting
Hi, I liked this poem. Did you know that someone else wrote a poem called waiting as well? Anyways I really liked both. My favorite line had to be: The ...
Feb 10, 2008 -
Re: Waiting
Hi, I really liked your poem. It was really sweet. I can relate to this poem, which I like because there are not many out there that you can relate ...
Feb 10, 2008 -
Re: Don’t Look At My State Of Mind
Hi, Wow, this poem was good. I kind of startled me when I read f*cking though. I do curse myself ,but never heard it in a poem like that. You ...
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: First Time
Hi T. Wow, this is one of your better poems. I like this better then mixed singles. It was so sweet and I know it wasn't based on a true ...
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: Happy New Year, Indeed.
Hi, Very well done. It was short and sweet. It's nice once in a while to read stories like this. There is not much else I can say. I thought ...
Feb 7, 2008 -
Re: Snow White- After the Poison Apple
Hi, Wow! This story is funny, i loved it. Like someone said early though, it's in the wrong section. Where did you ever come with an idea like this? I ...
Feb 7, 2008 -
Re: Removed.
Hi, For your first time writing poetry, it is really well done. I am not much poetry person. I really enjoyed this though! My favorite line has to be: Smoke ...
Feb 7, 2008 -
Re: Trapped
Hi, I really enjoyed the story line for this. I love reading about these types of things. There is not much else I can say about it. I liked this ...
Feb 6, 2008 -
Re: DO NOT READ
Hi A, So there are a fix mistakes here, that I'm going to fix (in bold). I'm also going to space it out so it will be easier for people ...
Feb 6, 2008 -
Re: How You Break My Heart (Chapter 4)
Hi, Your story line is really well done. I really like the idea. It felt really rushed to me though, how you just kind of jumped from, 4 to 7 ...
Feb 5, 2008 -
Re: The Party
Hi, Wow! This poem was excellent. You did a really good job on this. I didn't really understand this part though: Farewell my murderers, I'll see you in hell. I ...
Feb 5, 2008 -
Re: Fiery Rain
Hi, That story was very creative, I liked the choppy style. I never heard of a story done like that before. I have read stories told in animals points of ...
Feb 5, 2008
