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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Forgotten (my first poem posted here)

    Hi, Welcome to YWS! This the best site to post all your writing ideas. I only joined in January and I'm already in love with this site. So, this is ...

    Feb 12, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Wallpaper

    Hi, I liked this poem. It was very interesting and different. I didn't get why he did it at the beginning, i liked how, (no offense) it was a stupid ...

    Feb 12, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: I am Sixteen

    Hi, Excellent job on this piece. Really good writing. There is not much for me to crit. I really wasn't expecting him to be a boy. I thought it was ...

    Feb 11, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Waiting

    Hi, I liked this poem. Did you know that someone else wrote a poem called waiting as well? Anyways I really liked both. My favorite line had to be: The ...

    Feb 10, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Waiting

    Hi, I really liked your poem. It was really sweet. I can relate to this poem, which I like because there are not many out there that you can relate ...

    Feb 10, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Don’t Look At My State Of Mind

    Hi, Wow, this poem was good. I kind of startled me when I read f*cking though. I do curse myself ,but never heard it in a poem like that. You ...

    Feb 9, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: First Time

    Hi T. Wow, this is one of your better poems. I like this better then mixed singles. It was so sweet and I know it wasn't based on a true ...

    Feb 9, 2008
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Happy New Year, Indeed.

    Hi, Very well done. It was short and sweet. It's nice once in a while to read stories like this. There is not much else I can say. I thought ...

    Feb 7, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Snow White- After the Poison Apple

    Hi, Wow! This story is funny, i loved it. Like someone said early though, it's in the wrong section. Where did you ever come with an idea like this? I ...

    Feb 7, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Removed.

    Hi, For your first time writing poetry, it is really well done. I am not much poetry person. I really enjoyed this though! My favorite line has to be: Smoke ...

    Feb 7, 2008
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Trapped

    Hi, I really enjoyed the story line for this. I love reading about these types of things. There is not much else I can say about it. I liked this ...

    Feb 6, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: DO NOT READ

    Hi A, So there are a fix mistakes here, that I'm going to fix (in bold). I'm also going to space it out so it will be easier for people ...

    Feb 6, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: How You Break My Heart (Chapter 4)

    Hi, Your story line is really well done. I really like the idea. It felt really rushed to me though, how you just kind of jumped from, 4 to 7 ...

    Feb 5, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Party

    Hi, Wow! This poem was excellent. You did a really good job on this. I didn't really understand this part though: Farewell my murderers, I'll see you in hell. I ...

    Feb 5, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Fiery Rain

    Hi, That story was very creative, I liked the choppy style. I never heard of a story done like that before. I have read stories told in animals points of ...

    Feb 5, 2008


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