ladymask

I found this adorable. It has this sweet innocence to it, and a very nostalgic but clear look through a child's eyes. No real critique, unfortunately, but I really enjoyed ...

Firstly, this is lovely. :D Your images are brilliant, and perfectly portray that slipping, sliding, melting feeling which is given solidity by the cement and wax metaphors. I haven't said ...

Hehe. This is very cute :D Pencil personification -- very cool. The rhyme flows pretty naturally and the different images and parallels -- Israel's and France's greetings, for instance -- ...

You have a strong grasp on theme here, and the images you use are also very strong. However, I'd suggest using a bit more. Poetry is, of course, extremely subjective ...

I found this beautiful. I couldn't say exactly why, it's hard to pinpoint that in a poem sometimes, but I really did. I'd love to see it in a bit ...

I'm going to have to disagree with the reviews above, actually. First, punctuation and form in a poem should always be optional -- entirely up to the poet, and used ...

You have a very interesting metaphor going on here, with the fish, and I like how that single line titles the entire poem. Some of your other lines ("grow like ...

Nice work on a form of poetry that's fairly unused nowadays :) Just one or two things. I like the rhyme scale here, but have you considered switching it up ...

Rachael has already commented on a lot of what I noticed, so I won't restate. But first, let me say I enjoyed this very much and that you have a ...

This is quite interesting. I love the take you have here; typically abstract philosophy with this kind of bent focuses on 'I'll live my life fully then die' as opposed ...

It was killing me to know where I'd seen this before, and then it struck me. Do you post on Inkpop? Because I most definitely have read this :D You ...

I like this. It has an edge of darkness and despair that's almost like fire, or something ravaging and terrible...fire was actually the image in the back of my head ...

Aw. This was very cute :) I could almost see it as a start to a children's or YA book, depending on how you were going to take the rest ...