krazywriter

Wow. Great start. You pulled me right in. I love how much you use metaphors. You really get into your character's head that way. Let's see what corrections we can ...

Hello! Nice piece. Very thoughtful. I like your comparisons. A few things: Should the first line be a question? It doesn't sound like one. It looks like you had some ...

That's a random way at looking at the world. Sheep? When you think about it, it does kinda make sense. Some people do wander blindly, not understanding what's going on, ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! Krazywriterr here to give you a review. First of all, I'd like to say that this is a very interesting story! I'm anxious to know ...

Yes! More of this story! Glad you got this part up so quickly! Much improved from last time! Still have a few errors. “This is M18890,” Gage told me, “But ...

Great start! You've gotten my interest. Can't wait for more! Here's a few pointers for you: "I bet you don’t even know what the wordcomprehend means, do you?" Make sure ...

Cool story! About the length, yeah, it's a little long for one shot, but I like how you broke it up. The huge gaps between parts were really hard to ...

Cool. I totally agree with some of those things. A few corrections: "This is not true, In Europe and Asia..." Commas don't join compound sentences. This would actually be better ...

It's going well so far! So curious to find out more! A few corrections: "Hours past,..." Should be "passed" "Mr Samuel said dryly,..." Forgot the period after Mr not aloud.” ...

Weird story. But I like weird stories. The weirder the better. You did a pretty good job here. I didn't see any glaring errors. Your descriptions were good, too. I ...

Nicely done! This story is intriguing in its own way. You introduce a character who's very much afraid of what may be lurking in the dark and manage to get ...

Wow. Looks like this one's gone a while without being reviewed. Shall we fix that? First of all, let me say that I've read your previous chapters up to this ...

Love it! My dad is definitely one of the most important people in my life! :) I saw only one thing besides what RandomCollumns wrote. "shuld" in the seventh line ...

Hello! Krazywriter here. Nice poem you got there! Or is it a set of poems? Quick note on the format: It looks like you know how haikus are designed, but ...

Okay, that was interesting. Wherever did you come up with such an idea? It makes for an interesting little tall-tale of sorts. Improvements: You use a little too much repetition ...