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also, thanks for the review and hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

This is why everyone should just read the story in order; that way, we could all avoid confusion and we can see where the story is developing.

well, the purpose was to make the dialogue sound more "animesque" since much of the story was inspired by various harem anime that i watched over the years; also, i ...

yeah, i can take the grammar suggestions, but the dialogue is just what i wanted it to be; despite popular ideas, not all teenagers talk like how you think, using ...

that or guy thought Elizabeth was "hot" and couldn't say no to a pretty girl; i'm a guy, so i know we can't say no to beautiful girls.

i know you did and i appreciate that; also, i'm in college in my sophomore year.

Also, the "sweat beads" thing was suppose to amplify the anime feel to the story, but i can see that using it too much would get irritating. Forget to mention, ...

well, they are childhood friends and Haru is an understanding person, so,d despite being a vampire, he knows Elizabeth wouldn't hurt him.

You do realize that the transitions and the way it is written is MY style of writing?

pretty good; hope you keep it up.

this is a review. I like this poem; i like the reference to the angel in the beginning; a great example of symbolism. the theme of doubt and religion seems ...

Sorry about that; i meant for it to be a prologue, but then kept on writing and it turned into a chapter.

well, the grammar needs some work, but, all-in-all, it's still a good poem.

I take it that this is a story inspired by "Sword Art Online". Despite that, it's still a good story and well-written, if i must say. Although, I did notice ...

Also, a huge anime fan and member of my school's anime club.