kirstybree

I really liked this especially the fourth stanza. Its a story everyone knows but told through a perspective teenagers easily forget. Good job :)

Hey thanks. I didn't really like the ending either. I knew it didn't sound right but i didn't know exactly what. thanks for your help and i am taking out ...

This is short and sweet. I like the second stanza. Though some might say a little too simple I like simple. And I think everyone at some point can relate ...

This is a good poem, strong, but for me personally i can't feel it. it seems like it's detached. But other than that great job!!

I like this even though I am really sure what it is about. But the rhythm is very catchy and it somehow reminds me of a nursery rhyme. Nice work ...

I really like this one. The rhythm is nice. and it has a new spin on things. I love the first four lines. :)

I really like the chorus!

at first this seems like a bunch of random thoughts, but they do make some sort of sense if you really read it. it's good for something written when your ...

I too like the last few lines. though the rest of it didnt' do much for me. the idea behind is a good one but the style it was written ...

I've nade the spelling and grammer revisions. Thank you both for your reviews, it brought my own typing errors to my attention. :D

Wow, I really do like your style, the others have picked out the tiny little things, except I do like the word vacuum at the end. Though the title still ...

Even though this might not be in the right section, I love it. The way it's written is something I have never seen before. The imagry, the word choice, flowed ...

Okay. First off this is a common theme so, if you wish to tackle it then may I suggest that you try to put a different twist to it. Right ...