kimmybee

This is something I'd read again and again and again AND AGAIN. Oh dear God! That was beautiful- and I do love morbid things. But really though. The plot was ...

I like the idea but there were some nitpicks. My main trouble was keeping up. I think your structure was faulted for that. You see, your structure kept changing and ...

I really like the story you've got to tell. I think if you review this yourself and dissect it into paragraphs you could find a really nice plot build up ...

I wasn't going to leave a comment but then I observed the qual pupose of the structure` Yes my mind was indeed blown. Never before have I seen a poem ...

I applaud you ona job well done!! It isn't often I get to review a religious poem and so I'm particularly pleased! Especially as I felt my self fully expressed ...

You chose a very challenging topic to say the least. Unfortunately it was a bit prosaic. I thought maybe you needed to develop the developments as they came. You want ...

I completely got the idea you wanted to be resounded in the reader's mind. However I felt that the repetition of "I need control again" might have come across as ...

First of all, more power to writers! A person who gives up their talent undefensively is one unworthy of such a talent. Writing is such an art, such a beauty ...

Today seems just my day for reading exceptionally done pieces. Needless to say I found you work quite beautiful. It was poetic to last bit, even if it was a ...

So I disagree wholeheartedly with the previous commenter. Putting aside my preferences for any particular sport or lack thereof, I can appreciate a voice that tries to stretch above the ...

That was lovely. Like the previous commenter said, it was dry and unpretentious. Much like the narrator's brother's work :) I don't believe I have often come out of a ...

As an after thought, to prove I've even rationalized this, I'm sure you're like a reincarnation of Sir Conan Doyle. Yes sir. Literary genuis.

I'll try not to be repetitive of everything the previous commenters mentioned but here goes. First of all, Felicitation, GOOD JOB. That was so beautiful. Seriously. You had me from ...

:/ Could you put this in a more structured manner? i.e. separate into paragraphs etc according tot he basic rules of story writing so as to not scare of persons ...

I quite well like this *nods* mmh hmm! :D One tiny pick would be errr..thy spelling of "nodded" you've got 'noded'. Undoubtedly a typo but hey, I'm totally normal for ...