kevin25a

Okay this is a really awesome story idea, I'm looking forward to where you take it. I wasn't a mute but when I was in elementary school I was too ...

This was really good, I hope you continue it into a chapter novel. I think this could totally come out as a great chapter novel, and you definitely are good ...

I haven't read the previous chapter, but I find it odd you would wake up on a bed of stones and velvety powder, and not know how you got there. ...

Oh I don't think an army will want him with three big gashes on him. I don't like that pesky Tyranos, I have no opinion for Trill though. I'm wondering ...

A caterpillar rapist or caterpillar pedophile, that's funny as hell and creative. It will crawl up your leg and take advantage of you. It will worm it's way inside you, ...

This chapter was good but had a lot more errors than the last. I do like the story and the chapter, but you really should fix the errors. As you ...

I know I am terrible at punctuation, but your story was just full of abused commas. You replaced a lot of spots that should be periods with commas, and in ...

Okay so this chapter was really good, and very eventful. It started out normally, went into a date and time with friends, then home for a movie, then drama. Very ...

Is this a true story? Because the parenthesis you used made it seem like you explaining something you personally went through or experienced. Otherwise the parts like this. (I ordered ...

This was definitely the best chapter yet, I certainly didn't expect a dragon. Then again your name, your picture, the movies and books it comes from, I should have seen ...

Wow really, the dad doesn't see them for years and the one of the first things he says after finally seeing them is oh hey i'm dating someone. DOUCHE! Obviously ...

This story is really good and I definitely will be following it. Today I have made my decision. Even though I promised not to interfere with the livening, I wished ...

Well that was an eventful chapter with fun seriousness and drama. I have to ask, is the main character's family of Italian origin? Because it seemed like you hinted at ...

So Kim got laughed at the parasite that was eating at his shoulder as a bomb dropped, sounds like something I'd do. :) As it's a short story that means ...

This chapter was even better than the last, I love cherry blossom trees! I'm in agreement with Kanome's review, the first part she mentioned should be a description for the ...