Heya Holy, Pretzel here for a review of this second part of the short story that you wrote. I reviewed the last part yesterday, so I know exactly what happened here.I can't wait to read and delve into this second part, because I thoroughly enjoyed the first part.
Anyways, let's begin,shall we?
I opened my eyes, squinting from the sun beams that coxed me awake with their warmth, andthenblinded me with their brightness.
First that happened, and then the next thing happened? (looking at this specific sentence-with the sunbeams coxed her awake and then she squinted because they blinded her?)I think that this happens at the same time, at least it does for me personally in the morning. So all you really have to do is remove "then".
The bed of which I slept upon, was that of stones,
I find it funny that the lady asked if the bed was comfortable, when here it was obviusly not. Like, who would like to sleep on stones. Now, I don't know about your preference but I love to sleep on hard pillows. I know that I am weird, but I would never want to sleep on a stone. That's just too hard for me.

Once I could see her, she seemed a lot less... mature then I had originally assumed.
I think that this sentence here is invalid. Maturity isn't measured by your voice, your looks, you hair, or anything like that. Your age can be measured by looks, but your maturity is on the inside, and noone can see that just from a glance. You could write here that she seemed a lot younger than the MC expected her to?
Believe it or not, I actually like Lizzy's interactions with with Cass. The only thing is, that you don't really make her seem like a kidnapper. I mean, she looks like Cass and actually acts semi-normal around, is very honest with Cass(which most kidnappers are very secretive.) Lizzy, at least for me personally just doesn't seem to fit into the role of a real kidnapper.I think that you should mold her more into that.
Then the cow started into a trot- or for heavens sake, you can't call a thousand pounds of blubber bouncing a trot.But it was starting to speed up, let's just say.
This whole first sentence doesn't have to be here, and that's because it's useless, and it's almost like Cass is thinking to herself. Plus I really do feel like this is just some unnecessary information here.
Wind blasted my hair every direction.
Kind of hard to imagine here <,< Usually when it's windy and blowing outside, my hair blow into one direction, either in my face, or away from my face.

I have to honestly say that I was so disappointed about the ending. This is an amazing story, but the ending was just bleh. I felt like the word "Okay" was used in everyday normal life, that I find it boring. Maybe you didn't have any more creative ideas, or didn't know how to finish it. I would like to suggest this:
“I'm taking you to the Lunar Exchange Association.”
That could be the ending, and everyone knows that Lizzy is talking here. I think that it's a much more well-rounded ending,don't you agree?
Cass felt so casual after just being kidnapped. I would expect her to be shaking in fear, or missing her family, or thinking about her possessions on earth. Anything to indicate that she feels something. There's no emotion here, and I feel like she just does/agrees with everything that Lizzy says. For sure, I don't think that Cass is acting like a normal captive that was just kidnapped. Maybe reflect on that further?
One last thing, I was expected more of the moon aspect here. I could barely sense/detect that in this whole second part, because your barely mentioned it. This is just an important part of your story(it's actually in the title-right?) and so I think that you should incorporate it more. Does Cass see the moon at all? What does it look like from her eyes and how does she feel? I was confused as to their location of where they were, if they were in space,or on earth, or somewhere in between. I think that you need to be a bit more specific with that.
Anyways, that's it from me for today. I hope that this review helps you improve your writing, and if you have any questions/comments please PM them to me.
~Peace Out~
/Pretzelsing/
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