The Academy- That’s what we all call it, that’s what everyone calls it. It’s the place that everyone who has a special talent goes. It might not mean that they have an A+ in every class, they might even be failing their classes, but if our principal sees something in you that needs to be brought out, he will bring you here.
But, this place is not really where my story begins.
My story begins in a hospital in Boulder Colorado. Most infants as they are born cry out, with the voices that everyone has learned to recognize as that of a newborn babe. But I didn’t, my cries were silent, and could only be told by the tears running down my cheeks. It was not that I wasn’t trying to make a sound, to communicate, but my vocal chords wouldn’t work. By the time most children are first learning to crawl, I was walking. But also by this time, I had given up on ever being able to talk. So as soon as I was sent into a public school, I was immediately sent to a section of the school for the mentally disabled. You see, the doctors had not thought to check my vocal chords, so everyone thought that I chose to not talk, and that I was stupid and couldn’t learn at the same rate as everyone else. Sure, I understood everything people said, but they couldn’t understand the simple fact that I wasn’t dumb. I learned to read as soon as the teachers taught me the alphabet, which took at least three blinking months, spending about a week on every single letter.
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First day of sixth grade, everyone else in my class is really excited because we start to get electives this year, but not me. I don’t get electives, I have to spend a full day as the teacher shpiels me on the number one and I’m thinking of the book I was reading. I had to steal it from under the seat of my chair, but it was well worth it. It is a science textbook, and I was just starting to read about the inner workings of the cell.
I put my clothes on, which my mother at least understood that I knew how to do, not that it would make much of a difference in my reputation if my mother dressed me everyday. I got on the bus, sitting right in the middle of the bus, because all the people my age that talk to each other sit in the back, and all the people younger than me sit in the front, and the middle is where those who just want to be left alone sit. I stared at the leather pattern on the back of the seat, parts of which I had memorized. It was over an hour until I reached the school, but I didn’t mind much, I had over 7 hours of boredom ahead of me, and pretty much the rest of my life unless I got my hands on a book, almost any book.
The new teacher didn’t bother tell me her name, but I knew it because the other students who had known her longer called her Ms. Turnbaker. Ms. Turnbaker didn’t tell me her name, because, as predicted, she had already looked at my records and held up her pointer finger.
“One.” She said, in a slow voice, that I had usually heard used in day-care centers.
I rolled my eyes, which she must have thought extremely rude, and would dedicate a day to manners in the future, not that I really cared, I wasn’t going to learn anything anyway.
I held up my pointer finger mimicking her. Which is exactly what they wanted us to do anyway.
“Say It.” She said, more slowly than before.
I formed my lips, very very slowly forming the word “It.”
“Very good!” She said, clapping her hands a little.
I rolled my eyes again, trying to do my best to communicate to her that she was just as bad as all the others.
She held up her pointer and middle finger this time “Two” She said, making it sound as if it was three syllables instead of one.
My leash on my patience was fraying. I held up the same two fingers, and mouthed the word, exactly as she did. I resolved that if she got to ten in this manner, I was going to walk out of the door of the classroom, and go watch some class from the outside, with people said distracted the class, but let’s be real, none of my classmates want to look at me, first because they think I’m dumb, second because I weigh more than the rest of them.
Threeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Fooooooooooooooooooooouuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuur
Fiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiive
At this point I was staring at her braces, which, if you want to know, were green.
siiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiix
seeeeeeeveeeeeen
eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiight
By now, I was wondering how much psychotherapy the average kid would need after taking this class for a grade.
niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiine
teeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeen
I kept to my resolve, she tried to stop me, but I didn’t care. She called her higher-ups, which would probably call my mom, but I didn’t care. I ran down a few hallways, quickly getting lost trying to make sure that the authorities couldn’t find me. I knew that I wasn’t in the preschool, kindergarten, or even first grade hallway, but I heard people reciting the alphabet. I was slightly curious, so I followed the sound.
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I think you have a great idea for a story going. I'm definitely interested in what happens next to your character. I also found the main character to be relatable. That is a very important part to making a good story.
Since you never specified a gender for your character, I am using they as a singular pronoun, if you were confused.
Inconsistencies and inaccuracies:
1. "You see, the doctors had not thought to check my vocal chords"
This just doesn't really make sense at all. If they're in sixth grade, they're probably eleven or twelve. The doctors would have figured out something was wrong by then. In fact, they would have known as soon as they were born.
2. It is strange that no one recognizes how bright they are. They picked up on how to read very quickly and clearly do that a lot. Yet somehow no one notices? And it isn't like they're neglected and left to their own devices. They are in classes for the mentally disabled, yet their teachers don't focus on them and take time for them? The reason for those classes is so that students who need it can have a teacher that can spend more time with them. It just doesn't make sense that no one has noticed this in eleven or twelve years.
3. Mathematically, the amount of time it took them to read doesn't make sense. You said they could read as soon as they learned the alphabet, in about three months. That's roughly 90 days. But then you said they spent a week on each letter. That's 182 days. It doesn't add up.
Grammar, spelling, etc:
1. "The Academy- That’s what we all call it"
The T in "that" should be lowercase - you haven't started a new sentence.
2. "newborn babe"
Should be "newborn baby"
Describe things!
When is this taking place? We know it's in Boulder, Colorado, but when? Is it today? 50 years ago?
Also, you should describe your character more. We don't know anything about them, except for the fact that they're mute and in sixth grade.
Use imagery! Give us a feeling of what the school is like.
This was a little harsh of a review and I apologize. Don't get me wrong, I really do love your story and your character is so relatable! You also gave us an interesting view on how the mute are viewed in our society. I look forward to the next chapters!
This is really good
I think that this was super funny and sarcastic, and it really brings about a change in the way we perceive the mute in our society.
I think that you should definitely continue the story!
Hello, EmptySoul here to review your story.
Nitpicks:
I'm pretty sure that the character doesn't remember that she didn't cry as a baby. Who told her? Has she been told this a lot? Explain.
Why didn't the doctors check her vocal cords? It seems pretty odd that they didn't.
Why didn't she try to write a note or something to her parents that her vocal chords didn't work. Most kids wouldn't give up that easily on talking.
If you want to make a character talk, you should write it like this.
What I liked:
I really enjoyed the story overall. It was interesting and kept me wanting to read each line. I especially loved when she was making fun of the teacher. If I was smart, but I still needed to go in a school like this, I would make fun of the teacher too, so that seemed pretty realistic.
I also liked the ending a lot. I can't wait to read the rest.
~EmptySoul
Okay this is a really awesome story idea, I'm looking forward to where you take it. I wasn't a mute but when I was in elementary school I was too shy to be able to talk. I could never speak simply because I was too shy, but outside of school and in familiar places like at home I could speak better than most high school students. So I sort of can relate to the story, but for a different reason.

I also know what that is actually like being put in the "mentally disabled" classes as most schools will call it, and the arrogant teachers in those classes. Because I remember my mother arguing with my teachers putting me in math and reading classes at my grade level, but in second grade I could already do algebra, and 9th grade English classes. Which pissed my mother off, and I ended up just finishing the entire book for both in a day. I'm not surprised your character here mocked the teacher for being so stupid either, most special ed teachers are arrogant and don't know what the hell they're doing. They just assume they know what's best, and proceed with classes under that pretense.
I really look forward to your story, and would love a notification whenever you publish the next chapters.
Thanks! And I have a club where I notify those that would like an update on any of my clubs, here's the link if you want it
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clubs/2059
Okay, thank you.